All Comments on 'A Match for the el Maiens Ch. 23'

I check every day for an update. . ...The story is so rich with nuances. Arianna has come into her own, while we get another glimpse of Clair's depth of feeling for her. I really appreciate reading a story where the ladies have agency of their own.

I think it's very interesting to take on what is "honorable"among those in the military, when the truth is that these so called honorable statutes result in needless suffering among men who on any other occasion would be brothers united. The trouble with a strict code is that it is a binary. There is only room in the code for two choices, for me or against me. Intriguing to see Arianna take on the code and push its boundaries.

Wow, what great feedback. I have had some fantastic feedback through the Feedback form and in Comments, and am definitely going to rework the earlier chapters, which I will repost when I do. I can't tell you what it means to a writer to hear back from readers. The comments on how I could do better are so useful, and comments like this make me just want to keep on writing!

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I appreciate the decision to describe the battle and the aftermath from Ariannas point of view. It would have been hard to write what happened on the outside, and it would also have taken too many pages, unnecessary to the story.