All Comments on 'A Modern Oedipus Act 01-02'

Did not get past the first paragraph, I guess you didn’t want men to read this. I am not a woman and I don’t want to read a story written as if I am the woman.

Stories should NOT be written like the reader is one of the characters. It completely ruins the story by forcing you into a rigid perspective. This was barely even a one star for me.

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Second Person sucks.

but short and needs editing

Second person pov is fine in principle. But this is just badly written and not in any way erotic

Don't let these guys get you down. Its not bad. Just a little rough, you are in the ball park, just gotta hone your craft a bit

Didn't like it. Get yourself and editor or proof read your submission before submitting it!