All Comments on 'A Mother's Lust'

There so many typos, it made it hard to understand what you were trying to relate. You very obviously did not proof-read your material, and you allowed the auto word completion to substitute words with ones that didn't fit the dialogue at all.

I for one, do not care if you continue writing, I won' t be reading it,

You have the bones of a fun story; however, next time lay out your story in advance so that you can give it more complete structure. With respect to your characters, give us a little more detail and history. Still, it was a pleasant read, keep writing.

Hey, don't feel so bad, ignore people who are being mean. The points are true though, you really need someone to edit it and fix all the wrong words and grammar, and there is nothing more annoying than reading a page of an interesting story only to find the interesting bits have not been written yet. Remember, many will be reading this to masturbate to, so if the hottest sex scenes are not there, you are going to piss people off. I would love to read the finished story some day. Thanks :)

The writer DID say it was a first attempt, and that no doubt there were some grammatical errors, so please show a little leniency.

For a first effort it wasn't too bad;- better structured and more plausible than many submissions by more experienced authors.

I would have liked the son to return the next night and fuck her in his sleep, waking up just as he shot his load into her, but perhaps that will happen in a follow up story.

Three stars from me.

I notice from your profile that you haven't submitted any contributions to Literotica.

There is a very old and very true saying. "Those who can, do. Those who can't, criticise."

chapter quick

hope there is more to CUM<Pun intended>really got me interested in the end

Mother and son are so lucky to experience this form of uninhibited love. They are both coping with a delicate situation very well.

Alwaystaboo

When do we get the next part

You must be gay!!! Reading this story I can't wait to read where he fucks her in his sleep and then after he wakes up. And I don't give a flying fucking about grammar or editing! This is a hot story and a great Incest start. So we are all happy you won't read any more of this writer's story! Jus go away with the annony. assholes.

I jst want to say thanks to everyone for your thoughts and positive feedback. I am greatful that most of you have enjoyed what i have written so far. By no means perfect but i will get better.....and so will the story. I am currently working on it and will get it out as soon as i can. Thanks again.

Great first effort! Build-up and length was good. I usually go to full intercourse at least once.

You do need some work but you didn't do so bad for a first try. Also it takes a lot of courage to actually put your money where your mouth is. Not a lot of people will do as you did. I have been reading stories on this web site for about ten years now. I can say with some confidence that you have a good chance of making the story into a good one. So keep up the work your doing and let's see what happens.

can't wait for some more of this.

I liked your story.

The writing was, to be fair, rough. Spelling, grammar, wrong word...etc.

You can improve. There are proofreaders available if you look through the menu selections. If someone proofs and edits your work, look at their changes and you will quickly pick up some points. Also, give them a shout out in your story intro.

Good luck

I liked this. I think that you have a great deal of potential for developing this story into a very erotic series. You got a great start and I look forward to more.

Momma needs her baby boy and he needs his momma......

Look forward to the next chapter ;)

writing takes practice and with practice you improve.

I would suggest fleshing out the chapter, so to speak. More detail about the characters and their feelings and actions.

Each chapter should be at least 2-3 lit pages long.. so prob about 4-5 pages on word.

good job keep it up.

Good start I'd definitely like to read more of this story.

Yes i want to read more

Great start , keep going .

How soon before you give us more?

I need more of this mom and what she wants to do with her sons cock.

Great start!

I enjoyed what I read, but the story is only half done. Why did you leave your readers hanging like is - finish the story!

Hey BigPappy42:

Nice story. You have a tremendous amount of potential with this. I like the characters you've created for us.

Definitely a fun story and I look forward to more.

not bad a few spelling mistakes it definatly needs a second chapter , regards pete

I love it. Please publish part 2.

Enjoyed the story. Would like to see it developed. I would say more but since the author wrote this story in 2017 I doubt he will finish it.

Awesome start to a fine story but you can't leave us hanging like this! Please write more even if it has been a long time coming!

Need mom's son is a slave

This is half of a story. Like your favorite TV series finishing on a cliffhanger that never gets resolved. Where's the rest of it?