All Comments on 'A New and Delicate Balance Ch. 05'

Outstanding writing, powerful, emotional dialogue, gut-wrenching drama. Poor Eric - how will life shit on him again in the future? Was he born to be a victim? I am avidly following this tale.

This guy knows how to pick women! It will be interesting to see who the father of the baby is. I hope he catches a break somewhere down the line.

How much poor Eric suffers, and how little it seems he deserves it!

If he's anything other than a decent, loving guy trying his best, then I'm missing something. I keep rooting for him and rooting for him, as I did with Elaine; and the women in his life keep treating him about as badly as a man can be treated.

No fun for him, but beautifully written about and very powerful. Thanks Angique!

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Eric needs to find someone like Mary Irene was nothing but a lier and a cheat she should join Elaine they would be right for each other Eric first should get a lawyer and prove that the baby isnt his so he doesnt get hit with child support and then he needs to get Phil to accept that he is the father through DNA Tests.

Pat Murray

Atlanta,Ga

Yikes, Eric sure attracts the losers. Maybe it is time to hear from some of the other characters in this saga. How much will Eric take before he gets some form of revenge? Will Irene's pregnancy go full term; who's kid is it and what race is Eric? Questions, questions...

Time for Eric to grow a set, kick ass and take names, no more feeling sorry, turn the demon loose!

Time for Irene to grow up, take responsibility for her lies, disrespect, cheating. A lawyer she is, a liar by trade. She knows what she is and that she is to blame but lies to him and to herself. Divorce the bitch, if the DNA test make it yours, file for custody. No problems just let it go. You cant change a cheater, they will lie and promise you anything. But, at the first excuse, will cheat again and be able to explain it away again.

Angi,

You are very good. This story is getting interesting. I hope you continue to write and post your stories here.

The dialogue in this story is particularly bad. People just don't talk like this writer has them doing. Second, I still don't buy the premise for the story. It's pitifully weak.

...are we to assume that the child on the way is Phil's? It certainly seems that it is and that's why Mary didn't mention who it was that wanted a million from Phil.

men don't break apart so easy where i come from.walking around like a drama queen don't cut it.get some balls and go after phil and see who the baby belongs too.yes you been shit on,now it your time to shit back with a vengance.mr.nice guy sucks,fuck mary as well.or keep whining like a bitch.

let me guess ... he takes her back right? after all he is a man and anything a man feels or thinks is of no vaue... right?

very well written. you are one of the better writer on this site. keep it up. you're very good w/ feelings/emotions.

Things couldn't look much worse. For BOTH of them.

Couples DO get back together again in real life, you know. It is never easy but it can be done. Depends what they BOTH want and how much they want it.

Since I like happy endings I'm hoping he can forgive her and forget, over time.

He is obviously so much in love with her that it really hurts him deeply, very deeply. Maybe in a coupla weeks or so, they can talk!?

come on nightowl...look I know you love the happy ever after shit and supee wimps but given ERIC's history with his previous nasty EVIL wife the fact that Irene KNEW this and still openly and wantonly fucked PHIL... come on

.........................................no way can they reoncile.... besides knowing this writer ERIC will be ganged by lesbian Klingon aliens in the next sad pathetic chapter

He jumped out of the frying pan into the fire

Beautiful writing about pain is still assimilated pain delivered purposely by a vile female writer seeking to grind wimpy and all caring males into the gutter.

How's that for delicate imbalance!!!

I think the best aspect of this story is the excellent quality of the writing. The imagery, the adept use of language, all are very good. But I guess I'm old fashioned. When I studied literature, I learned that the hero of a story (it appears to be Eric, correct?) is the one who goes through a change. So far, despite repeated lessons (don't we ever learn from history, which often repeats itself), Eric can't seem to change his behavior. I still feel that Eric is the abused "wife" based on earlier chapters and it seems to again hold true in that he just keeps taking abuse. He says he tries to avoid drinking but then gets drunk with his buddies (he still can't face his problems squarely), and of course, in walks his unfaithful wife at the precise time he is confused by the booze. She is a lawyer and once again represents the traditional, powerful "man" in the relationship, behaving as though the "rules" don't apply since lawyers make them. So having heard his troubles from his previous marriage, then supposedly falling in love with him, Irene decides to cuckold her husband with another attorney who clearly feels the rules don't apply to him either. So she feels the need to prove her power and hurt the one she loves, just like an abusing spouse in real life. She knows as a lawyer and from experience that cheating always comes out eventually. And (this is hardly original) Phil's cock is bigger, or at least thicker, than Eric's. Eric is depressed again, figuring he attracts women who look at him for the wimp he obviously is. This symbolizes the abused woman who often seeks repeatedly-abusive relationships with men likely to mistreat her again (i.e., "Men Who Hate Women and the Women Who Love Them"). For a man who is obviously intelligent, he really acts unbelievably stupid. Mary knows about all Phil's cheating. One would think Eric could figure it out, having experienced the cheating spouse in the past. The signs are always there; quick blow job to dissuade Eric from an actual love-making session, the partner not acting right despite all attempts to act "naturally" and of course, the shower to wash away the traces of the other lover . . . It is unrealistic for Eric to reconcile with Irene -- can he really ever trust her again? If the child is his (DNA testing is mandatory in my book), then he can get visitation, or joint custody, or whatever. If not, then he should sue Irene, Phil, the lawfirm, and whomever else he can, for as much as he can get. Even then, he should file against Phil for loss of consortium and so forth. I will be interested in how this all ends. I am doubtful that Eric can ever be happy. His self-esteem must be at minus 100 about now. It is time for Eric to get into therapy.

I am telling you in advance. This is just a preview for a more detailed review. The reason: you have a lot of promise. There seems to be a disconnect between the content of the story and the beautiful style. It’s like someone who bought the most sophisticated graphic design machine which can do wonders, but for now has only limited control over its performance. At times the stylistic features match the content, and the result is a crushingly strong piece. At other times I groan and want to tell you: No, No No; no guy would ever talk or behave like that with other guys, it may sound wonderful in the sentence but it’s just not real.

I want to congratulate you of course on getting the quality award. I hope you take it as a well deserved acknowledgment of your technical skills, and as an encouragement to work hard in the future on building more solid internally cohesive plots.

Are all your normal, straight, white male characters stupid wimps? Will you see any of them who have a modicum of morality as having any strength or brains? Do they all have to be beaten to a pulp either literally or mentally? What do you have against nice guys?

You must have been a good student, as proven by the adept demonstration of the structural analysis of the story. The FUNCTION of the “abused wife” now transformed into the character of the husband fits him like…bruised face of an abused wife. The FUNCTION of the “abusive husband” fits the wife like you took it from a manual.

Which makes me wonder, are we seeing a new wave of a feminist revolution (at least a literary one) as seen by several female writers, to counter the post- feminist one, and to move the pendulum back towards the previous generation of the more militant feminist revolution (think 60’s) where man roles where aspired and imitated and more overt expressions and or actions of cross gender hostility were freely exchanged? Hmmm…maybe each generation feels the need to have their own.

(Just a reminder for my self imposed policu of top rating for a repeated comment. I don't feel that any writer should be penalized by a reader who posts more than once by repeatedly getting less than top score by the same reader. At the same time readers should not feel pressuredto not comment more than once. Thus my solution)

The baby is Phils why does she denie the baby isnt phils and why does Eric try to stay with her just use the pictures of phil and her then file for divorce.

Pat .

Atlanta,Ga

EVEN IF YOU STILL LOVED HER. THATS REAL LIFE...ONCE SHE HAS CHEATED YOU'LL BE LOOKING AT HER WITH A MICROSCOPE...ALL THE TIME WAITING FOR HER TO CHEAT AGAIN..YOU CAN'T LIVE LIKE THAT

really, is this guy a cheater magnet? WHat the hell!

But I hate to see a man (or woman, either) get screwed like this. I hope that something nice happens to him, I thought it was Irene that was his savior.

The evil psychopath (DWmoroncuck) tries to make others see him as the victim. Fucking pedo.

But this story is so very brilliant.

Thanks for sharing.

How long are you going to keep punishing Eric? He's a good guy, doesn't bother anyone and yet he hooks up with sluts who fuck him over. We shall see...

and the comments add a certain pleasure too, so strange !

Another great line:

Even at that moment I thought it was the most courageous thing someone ever did.

But dang this is well written, This whole genre of I Love him but cheat on him may make sense to a certain segment of the female population, but I find it literally repulsive. Old Bear

Congrats. Good chapter. Four out of five. I am intrigued as to where this is going. Lots of emotion which I like. Lots of detail and colour which I also like. Yet this whole story is balancing on a knife's edge. Lot's more chapters to read and yet if it is just him being cucked by woman after woman it will be a failure in my view. You have established several interesting characters. The story will succeed if you can tie them all together somehow. Also be careful not to use the device of Eric refusing to listen too often. A few times is understandable. Again I hope he doesn't end up emasculated or a wimp. I know some people like those kinds of stories but I am not one of them. I am new to your writings and I don't know if that is your genre.

gripping drama. It has been so long that I can't remember where it goes from here. Five stars.

Great story, and I love your pace.

Please put Eric out of his misery and make him kill himself.

What pathetic dribble!!!! When you witness your wife and "friend" blatantly flirting shamelessly and do nothing about it, you get what you deserve!

You try to make your Eric come off as tough, but he's a pathetic wimp!

The two "wives" are just sluts! Maybe a reflection of yourself!

First you say they live in an apartment in chapters 1-2, in chapter 3 they live in a house while he's thinking about divorce after seeing a lawyer. Which is it? Did you lose your train of thought while writing this so-so story?

and repetitive.

If Irene has him beaten up I will probably laugh hysterically.

angiquesophie is one of the premier writers on Lit. She has a distinctive voice and sparse style that intelligently probes the interior lives of her characters. There are few writers here who can compare; Girl in the Moon comes to mind, but there are damn few others. It pains me to read the unthinking, vitriolic comments by (always) anonymous men who have nothing good to say and want to say it over and over again. The ingratitude displayed toward volunteer, unpaid, amateur authors is very dispiriting. I imagine many stories never get published because of these loutish comments. It's too bad the owners of this site can't get a better handle on this problem.

She is a solid writer, but not nearly the best in my opinion. We all have favorite's, don't let someone who has a differing opinion ruin your day. This story was good not great, I give it a 3***.

Yeah? Well, that's just like... uh... your opinion, man :-) There are five great ladies who still write here in loving wives whom I read over and over: Patricia51, Amyyum, Girlinthemoon, Outofshadows, and yes, Angiequesophie. There is one more, but she prefers that her identity not be known. Ceeesss was another, but she doesn't seem to be writing, these days. They all bring something a little different to the table, and every one of them are the best there is at the type of story they write. We are blessed to have them, and I love every one of them. March 8 was International Women's Day. I should have congratulated every one of them for making this a better place to read. I do so belatedly. Thank you, ladies.

That's probably why you overlook so many great male writers when extending invites to these great days, so busy reading wonderful female authors with a lot of talent. Girl may be my favorite of the new writers and Patricia is LW royalty in my opinion. Just like Tennessee, glad you have favorite's who keep you coming back :) girl.

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WBC4EVER!

Totally agree with this. Some idiots cannot distinguish content from quality. If they don't like the story content then the writer is bad. It is their pitiful problem.

5* without question.

is an improvement over the previous chapter.

Deserves everything that happens to him.

...and their lame attempts at explanations? They really are pathetic.

You fucked up. Really badly. And are now pregnant with someone else's baby.

There no way of explaining this that doesn't make you look and sound worse. Crawl away somewhere and don't fight the divorce when it happens. Move on with life.

Altough it has been stated how different this was from his first marriage the last statemen form him in the chapter before the one previous to this his statemnet not only hinted aty the infidelity but that he somehow noticed, either because the damage form the first wive left him damage and distrustfull at some level or he is paraniod always waiting for the other foot to fall. That he went so long without noticing has me confused, well its obvious I jumped the gun on my conclusion.

After three years I find myself scoring the chapters about the same. Admittedly, I have a weakness for reconciliation stories, even if the couple are not perfectly reconciled.

At this point in the reread I find that the Eric character has not benefitted from his prior marriage failure. He appears stuck in this "perfect marriage to a slut" mentality. From the Nietzschian perspective, Eric doesn't seem to have benefitted from the ""Was mich nicht umbringt macht mich stärker" approach to overman.

Oh well. There are five more chapters to go.

I will wait to see the rest of the chapters, but so far I see Irene with one evil act, and then I see Eric acting stupidly and over-reacting. Sorry - but regardless, people should at least talk, and Eric is acting like a spoiled child having a tantrum. "For better or worse" means that there will be "worse" -- at least once.

Damn right Skippy, its you! You attract cheating cunts like shit draws flies. You never learned from your first experience with a cheating slut and you jumped right back into marriage after you just got away from your first shitty marriage. And guess what, she's a cheating slut as well and is carry's her lover bastard's child and intended to pass it off as your's. She's a lying cheating cunt and you fell right into her clutches.

Oh my "it was a dream??" That's the best she can come up with? At least doofus didn't fall for it but is it going to take him another eternity to divorce her?

The MC in this story said it best. "Bullshit".

Great story; emotionally invested I am.

Wipe your shoes and get the crap off.