by LuthienEllesar
You go girl!! Keep up the wonderful writing. Please add chapterS to this story. Really a WONDERFUL STORY!!!
One helluva story. Sure wish and hope that you will continue on with this one. Best wishes for your continuing success.
GOOD GOD ALMIGHTY this was so well done that I didn't mind the fast pace to sex. Normally I like some build up but the intensity of the story need the hungry sex to happen quickly. Very Very well done!
Well written, volcanically erotic, and succinct! I look forward to more in this genre.
i think this is one of the best stories i have read so far, great job, and very well wrote :)
The story is the coming together of a couple of people who has wanted the love that was theirs to share. It doesn't make any difference if they are brother and sister, the love that they have for each other couldn't be denied. Thanks for the post....Rich
why do you writers think it is sexy and fun to put attempted rape and rape in your stories you are just giving the younger readers the wrong idea about how to treat a girl if you have to put that shit in your story then put it in the nonconsesual area
Great story. The sex could have used a little more description and length (no pun intended). One minor detail got in the way of making it a 100: Am I the only one who thinks frenching after hurling is gross? Even with a box of breath mints, eeewwwww. (Sorry).
would love to read more.... this story was just hot and wild and completely down my alley....keep up the great work!
I really enjoyed your story, and would love to read more about what happens after that magical evening between Dawn and Michael. Great character description, and passion put in. It was very good. I probably would only enjoy it more if the sex didn't happen so quickly, but over all, it was a great story.
I enjoyed the story,from the humor at the start to heated ending,but then I enjoy all you stories,keep up the great work.
You should keep writing the story of dawn and michael I would love to know what else happens to them.
Please write more about Dawn and Michael!!!!! I want to be Dawn, I am so turned on right I wish I had a brother!!!!
Hello. That was a really nice story. I wish the sex had been a tad more descriptive but that really isn't too necessary. I would like there to be a sequel or an epilogue to bring closure to this story but the way you ended this chapter was a good exit as well. It's open yet there are no loose ends either so it's really your call.
James