by horndogg_90
Good story concept, but either get an editor or just proof read!
Olin yökerhossa ulkomailla naisen kanssa. Me menimme humalassa hotellihuoneeseen nussimaan. Nainen oli siskoni, kukaan ei tuntenut meitä.
This was so simply written, its like a teenager's dream. Grow up!
Your writing has the depth and sophistication of a 6th grader. Stilted sentence structure, poor pacing and a limited vocabulary.
Writing is not for you.
So basically raped her three times by not pulling out and then raped her ass, which would have torn and been bleeding. Sucky story. If there is a rape section then put it there, though I dont suppose it will get good ratings there either:/
Dude:
When your girl gets with you, it is mutual consent. Refusing to pull out and ignoring his sister's pain is tantamount to rape. You really missed on this one.
i would love for my own brother to fuck me and suck my breasts!
there is no way in hell that she would not be pissed at him and tell thier parents that he came in her and raped her ass and there is no way she would ever allow him to fuck her again this garabage belongs in the nonconsent area
The guy didn't have the common courtesy to pull out when she asked him too. Then forced his way into her ass. That is RAPE!!