All Comments on 'A Night to Remember'

Should not try and write stories.

Use real words, not internet shorthand. Also, grammar is a wonderful thing.

and then and then and end

i dont understand what your saying about short hand, I realise there is a couple of mistakes in words. But unless you sit for hours going over and over story, you can{t find them all.

hot story!

I enjoyed the 69 scene especially!!!

Not bad. More dialog, and a little less, "then," and ", as". Shorter sentences are a good thing. Also grammar and editing a little more will help. The difference between 3's and 4's, and 4's and 5's is the small details, correct spelling, capitalizing names (jack a couple of times.)

You could write really hot stuff, keep at it, and please understand the comments are meant to help you write better.

I like getting comments back about the story´s, as I´m just starting out I know I still have alot to learn. I do use spell check but it doesn´t always pick things up. As far as more dialog goes I´m still practising on that when I try it sounds silly so I end up just leaving it out. but again ty for the comments.

If your spell check isn't working correctly then you need to have someone proofread for you. Your spelling and grammar mistakes take away from the story and make a person not want to read any further because they think the story is not going to be any good because of it.

Forget all the negative comments, one hot story. Keep it up!

Great ATM.