All Comments on 'A Night To Remember'

Your ideas are good, but many structural and grammatical errors... Hard to read and keep ideas in proper order... Keep working and reading others work to see how to paragraph, show dialogue changes etc. Nice idea and nicely developed. Good luck with your writing.

Why can't we just be happy that he's shared a very intimate, sexy moment as his first story. Sometimes there's too much an emphasis on the lit here and not as much recognition on the erotica.

Nice story....wish it had happened to me.

Yuck