All Comments on 'A Night with Daddy'

Why did you write in first person? I wasn't there.

This is the poorest way to write as story. Of course, the mindless illiterate bots will go Rah, Rah.

I think you mean second person, but otherwise I agree - makes it sound clumsy.

Loved the role play and build-up. Thanks for sharing your story.

this was put in the wrong category, it is bdsm not incest/taboo. and the perspective would only work for those of us readers that r actually subs to answer the comments about perspective. u did a good job of showing a naive innocence in the girl, but at the same time u made her seem too young or too immature to b a good little sub for her "daddy" all in all it has great potential....i would suggest talking to a sub or exploring ur own submissive nature to learn a bit more

very very hot

Thank you all for your comments; however I am a submissive so i need not talk to another submissive about it. Also I am a 24/7 live-in submissive so I do know what I am doing in that regard. In addition I posted the story in incest/taboo because let's face it, ageplay is a taboo subject for some. Plus this is my first attempt at submitting a story. But thank you all for your feedback.

i say good for you for writing and having it out there for others to read...if they dont like it oh well...your story your style.

Just how a Daddy should love his daughter...

I don't know if my comment will make a difference with you, because I am just one individual giving one opinion. On the slim chance it makes a difference I am leaving it. As a woman I am not interested in stories written as if I am a man. This same story could have easily written without that aspect, and it would have avoided alienating a significant amount of readers on this site. That is not to suggest your story should include something for every reader, but why narrow it down to a select group who read this type of genre? Would you consider a story with the characters not connected to the reader? I would enjoy reading such a story.