All Comments on 'A Paladin's Journey Ch. 16'

love this story, thanks for a great read.....

Your ending the chapter there? Right on a wave hanger.

Tapping finger waiting for the next instalment.

Thanks.

Thanks for the new chapter. Looks like things are getting worse for every protagonist except Aran, and even he faces inevitable defeat against the Guardians/Titans. Ultimate victory is most likely to go to Maloth and Maharad.

Separately, with this update my archive indicates that the Dwarvish word "ru" translates to both "you" and "are." I must have screwed up the analysis somewhere and will have to do a lot of reworking, or that word has 2 meanings.

You seem to like stripping every single minor victory from the protagonists. Great cliffhangers to keep the reader interested, don’t get me wrong, but I’m left with asking “can they not catch a break at all?” This contrasted with the ridiculous success Maloth has seen. The worry I have is that David will be left without his sling against Goliath. At some point, that may turn away some readers.