All Comments on 'A Rich Man's World'

but try to keep straight whether you're in 3rd or 2nd person...a couple of "you"s snuck in there

If the main character hadn't bragged about how fucking huge his cock is. I know it seems to be a main part of your story, him forcing stupid Trish to be fucked by his monster, but I find it rather pathetic. Like the writer is trying to make up for something he doesn't actually have.

:)