by D_Lynn
Heartwarming, romantic, endearing. A perfect ending to a wonderful series. Because each update came so quickly - a big thank you for not making your readers wait - I haven't read each update completely - some I have, others I skimmed. But I love the overarching story of Dolphus and Ashira, I loved how you created individuals, distinct by their names and their personalities, as well as accurately portraying the differences between males and females; for example by how females love to hear words of affection, while males typically demonstrate their love by their behavior, rather than in words alone. And of course, the side stories of the coup in the human villages. So many layers of subplots, yet each felt complete, and not just a distraction. One of the best I've ever read on this site - a standing ovation!
Thank you for sharing such a great story. I thoroughly enjoyed reading each chapter.
Understanding that this story is complete i won't beg for more but i like your style of writing and hope to enjoy more of that.
As for what you asked feedback on what youve written... you have a wonderous way of portraying various personalities and keeping it fresh.. the non human elements are great and doesnt seem to slip into morphing into a human side ie the full satyrs stay focused and the half human elements can be developed under certain circumstances ie mating life... mind you this is 7am for me and im still morn a fuzzy brained trying to express myself lol
enjoy the feedback :)
I liked the pacing and the characterization in your story. It was easy to be drawn into Shi and Dolpus' world and their journey. The quick updates were great, too.
You did NOT just end it like that!!
I enjoyed your story. Hopefully there will be a spinoff to continue with their lives.
I absolutely loved this wonderful story! Your writing style is just alluring and captivating! I look forward to new stories from you and thank you for the HEA!
I've really enjoyed your story! Very enjoyable :) I love that you'd pre-written it and we weren't left hanging for ages for new chapters. Loving your ending too! Well written and interesting. A great read.
Are we going to get an epilogue or maybe a spin-off with one of their kids? I don't want their story to end!! :( lol enough of my whining, this was an amazing story and I hope you continue writing!!
Thank you for sharing such a great story. I would really like to read more about the other characters or any other stories. One of the greatest for sure.
I'm overwhelmed by the response to this story. I honestly didn't know if it would resonate with this audience. I'm so thankful that I posted it here rather than publishing it.
Thanks for all the positive comments and excellent feedback. I am trying to respond to the PMs I've received, so bear with me. I don't currently have plans to continue this story, but maybe a muse will whisper in my ear to do so. Either way, I will continue to post stories on Lit - I just don't know which categories.
There are many stories to choose from on this site, so I am grateful that you've chosen this one to spend your valuable time reading. I will always endeavor to make it worth your while.
Yours in writing,
Dakota Lynn
A truly exquisite series! Your writing production rate spoiled us all as fans of your reading! I'm going to miss checking daily for your stories, so please as others have asked, write more and/ or write a spin-off/ update series on the others and their challenges and joys in satyr life! Thank you so very much for your gifts :) xoxoxo
Loved the characters, setting, and that sucked-in feeling of being in a great story.
I impatiently await your next story!
Satyr's species must fight for there right to exist. Don't let the Satyr's species die out. There has to be a way to save them. Satyr's race must learn to work together as one flock. Not each flock for themselves. Please find a way to save the species not just one flock.
It seemed like a little fast paced but then I realized it is still very good. I really enjoyed it.
This was a beautiful story. Thank you for writing and sharing it. It was very well written, creative, thoughtful and erotic. It was a delight to enjoy and I will sorely miss looking for the next installment.
Thoroughly enjoyed this story, thanks for a start & great finish. Sadly so many writers do not end their stories now on here and it was very refreshing to enjoy from start to finish. Loved the characters and the whole story.
Hopefully we will see more in time too. :)
Cheers.
It was wonderful, I enjoyed every minute reading your creative and steamy story! You are very talented! I would love to read more, the character development was amazing!
Thought provoking, sexy, quick updates. What more could we ask for? I thoroughly enjoyed it and look forward to reading more of your work.
This was really well written and big bonus I got to read it in its entirety no waiting for updates!! I sometimes struggle with humans mating with non humanoid forms but this was so descriptive and delivered enough on the emotional side that it wasn't an issue, well done!
Love it!
Will miss looking for more!
My most favorite line... ""I have seen this beautiful creature from the inside. When she is not protecting herself, afraid of being harmed. When she is open and free.""
I can't believe the very end! How is that possible?? That is just wonderful! I really wish you'd consider writing more of this story.
Thank you so much for sharing your gift of writing with us all.
i appreciated the writing style and the storyline was encompassing. way to go!
I don't often comment but felt compelled to after reading all of this story in one go. This was a beautiful story.
This is literally the best story i've read on here so far. Please more NonHuman!
Sweety, when the book gets published, I'd buy it in a heart beat. It was emotional, loving, intense, erotic, so well written, such a wonderful love storey, I was so touched with it's life and death. I'm not making much sense but you sure did . Bravo, Bravo, Bravo......WOW
It's been a long time since i have read anything on here that has allowed me to vision whats happening as it happens!!! Loved it!! Thank you!
I enjoyed reading this story immensely!!! thank you!!!
I loved reading this story ...........please write more about them.
Loved this story. You are a fantastic author. Hope to read more of your stories.
I really loved the story and in all honesty have little complains, one being what happened with the satyress that you mentioned might be pregnant before mating season? you never said anything again. Anyway it was a great read and I honestly think that this is one of those rare gems that keeps me coming back to this site, Ill be looking forward to read more of your stories.
I read a comment at the end of Chapter 1-2 that seemed to me to be as parsimonious as it was condescending. It is, perhaps, wise to read the entirety of a story prior to comment or criticism... I have - and thank you for such a treat! I really enjoyed it, reading it from start to finish in one go. I think I could have fallen in love with 'Dolphus' myself and not just for his kindness and common sense!
As the title says, beautiful! There's sex, of course, mixed with just the right sort of romance to make it sweet but not sickening. And that last line was great! I had accepted that she wasn't going to have any more cossets, and then he says that. It didn't seem like it was put there expressly for the purpose of a "happily ever after," because she was going to get that regardless.
This has got to be one of my favorites among what I've read on this site. Cheers for the hard work!
So, having birthed, in order, first Lucius and then Draco, can we expect Ashira to give birth to Scorpius next?
really enjoyed ur story! itz rare i make comments but this was such a well rounded story. a few places could have been clearer, though its mainly because it jumped ahead and felt slightly rushed in those places. but anywho thank u 4 an amazing read, the only time i put it down was sleep and work! lmao thanx =)
~ whisper
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One of the best written stories on Lit, hands down. I loved it. The Sex was amazing yet it also managed to be interesting outside of that and i was surprised when chapter 11-12 nearly brought me to tears! If only I could continue reading about Ashira and Dolphus.
Thank you so much for sharing such a great story..
The ending left me feeling excited, you have to have this publish. This is the story of a lifetime this will be the best selling book ever. I won't mind reading it for eternity, that is how much I love it.
This is one of the best stories I ever read on here. Please write some more stories like this.
I completely loved this story and am sad to see it end! I love the characters and really felt part of the story. You have an amazing talent and imagination. I look forward to all your future writings!
This was the most impressive story I have read to date. This was erotic......
This is a great story! I loved every chapter of it!
I loved the main characters and how their relationship evolved.
And the erotic parts were hot.
I absolutely love this story & I will be rereading it often! Got very into the story line & attaced to the characters. Sad to see it end!
This is more of a love story than a sex story. I really enjoyed it. I liked the style and perspective of the yarn and look forward to more of the same.
Interesting development all the way through and a sweet ending.
Well Done
Ramjet
thank you sharing such a beautiful story. this is the best work I have read on this site. you have real talent.
Thank you for Sharing this it's better than many books I have paid for...
what a wonderful book to read. i was riveted from the beginning straight to the end. you had me thoroughly involved in their lives and the struggles.
Thank you, Author. That was a wonderful story. <38663
D best novelle I have read so far. U got me entangle in their very tot. Thank u 4 dis free gift
This is exactly what I want to read. It's like a perfect romance novel. You are a very talented writer! Racy and just heavy enough to be actually good erotica and with a great story line that makes the story well worth reading. Thank you for the awesome read!
Thank you for such a wonderful illustration of the Serenity Prayer. God, grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference. And in such an enchanting fable. Well done.
This last chapter has me in tears. Such a beautiful story, the emotions written are so very real and relatable. I look forward to reading more of your work.
This story would be awesome as an HBO series. While it wouldn't last as long as GoT it would be a big hit.
This was probably the best story I have read on this site! Well thought out and written with only a few spelling and grammatical errors. I loved it and it had me in tears and invoked strong emotions from me. I would have this published as a novella, as it is that good!!
This is the best Sci Fi and erotica story I have read on here. Can't wait to look at what else you have written.
This is the best literotica I have read and also the favorite sci fi also. I could have read of all the generations to come! Please consider some spin offs if you will.
This was a compelling story it was so richly told you should put this out i would but this. Consider making an ebook debut
For real tho, so many stories are left unfinished and it drives me up the wall. So That being said, thank you for finishing this wonderful story. I would highly suggest taking this story and making an ebook or even rewriting it into a novel. There are so many options. Thank you :)
I love your style of storytelling; the eroticism is off the chart. Never did I imagine I would walk away with a lesson on trust and faith from an erotic story, pleasantly surprise. I am looking forward to your future postings.
An epic read that kept me glued to the screen! Truly enjoyed the premise along with your host of characters... looking forward to the possibility of a spinoff? Would definitely purchase the ebook or real book
This story drew me in from beginning to end. All the characters were amazing and your writing style is wonderful. I started reading this as a sort of research to better my own writing style, but the story held my attention the entire time and I wasn't really able to do so because it was so great. I don't think I can offer you anything constructive because my somewhat inexperienced eyes didn't see anything wrong with it at all. All the best to you. Please go on creating wonderful works of art like this one that will captivate and inspire awe in your readers :)
You are awesome!
Omg I did not see that ending coming! It was perfect!!! Such a great read!
Read it 3x and still loving it!
Please write another story for this category (nonhuman) .. thanks
Love, Dolly
This was wonderful. I enjoyed your world building and the interplay between your characters.
I absolutely love this story! You are one of the most talented writers on Literotica. Or anywhere for that matter. You not only entertain us but provoke an examination of deeply held perceptions along the way. Since you haven't been active here for a while I hope that means you've moved on to published works and I for one plan on hunting you down for the opportunity to read more! It's rare I'm so inspired to follow authors outside of free websites due to a nearly nonexistent financial resource for entertainment. The exception is when the quality of work literally supports a better sense of wellbeing as does yours. Being disabled with intractable pain, saying that your storytelling enhances my quality of life, is the highest praise I can offer. Given my physical limitations I'm unable to first hand experience many opportunities that promote endorphin release. When I can achieve that from reading it can be profound. On an even deeper level our present social and political atmosphere can feel hopeless. Your exploration of evolution was comforting and the way you used that BDSM scene as a correlation was mind expanding! There are times I emotionally hold onto situations outside of my control until it's in tatters. Leaving myself shredded in the process. I was right there along with Ashira during both her discovery, submission and subsequent release. It's just as complex to discern choice & fate as it is to process pain & pleasure. Both can be messy, uncomfortable, emotional and beautiful resulting in a deeply moving experience. I'm really hoping you read this to know how much I value and appreciate you freely sharing your talent with us. To all of the authors here... THANK YOU! I never take your contributions for granted.
Such wonderful characters. Such an original and unique premise. All told an excellent story. I’d like to read more of this world.
I was so engrossed in this series since the very first chapter. I loved the story, the characters, the plot twists and I was even crying by the end. I recommend this series to all who are interested; you wont be disappointed.
This is my second read through of it and It took me on the same emotional roller coaster that it did last time. I have two critiques: both you don't really need to pay mind to unless you feel like it could help your story. I agree with the user who suggested leaving out more scientific terms terms related to chemicals or technology: things or knowledge they wouldn't have access to. That is unless these things do exist in their world and you haven't mentioned them. My second critique is related to the appearances of the characters. I find that I wasn't able to picture them accurately because I feel like you could've provided more details on the way they looked. Of course, that could just be your writing style (leaving it to the audience to decide). In which case, pay this no mind. You did a phenomenal job. I loved this from beginning to end :)
literally read this whole story in one sitting. I enjoyed the character development and the way you told the story.
One of the best stories out there! I just love their relationship! Thanks for creating this!
I'm just here trying to read a smutty story I've become emotionally invested in but Hella enjoy the steaminess of...and I almost cry at the end when she's pregnant
This was an incredible journey to take with the two of them. I love how he was finally able to express to her how much she meant to him and almost cried at the ending when he told her she was pregnant. Great story! Please keep writing, I love it!!
This was an outstanding story. Great chracter development with just the right amount of sex thrown in.
I've read the entire story in a single sitting at least 4 times since it was released. I love it. I just read so much that it becomes fuzzy until I begin again and then I'm compelled to finish it and I never regret it. Thank you.
Oh mah lordy! I couldn't stop reading! This was beautifully written, I have to admit several chapters brought tears to my eyes. I love it! Great, great work. Thumbs up to you.
A very good story, very positive and the end ....
Great philosophy at the end. Thanks for sharing this with us.
This was incredible. So complex and shifting. Character growth and joy and pain. Incredible. But it's 3am so I'm going to have to read another day. I wonder what I'll dream tonight...er this morning...
I don't usually read the Syfi stuff, but this series may have won me over. Exceptionally well written and it kept my interest all the way to the end.
I'm kinda late to the party but holy cow this is easily on my top 5 stories. WOW your world building skills are excellent, without getting too caught up in the whole world.
For sure one of the best stories on this site. If you ever decide to write another story with these characters i would happily pay to read it. Thanks for writing and sharing!
Wow! This story was amazing. I've never been so satisfied, emotionally after reading a story. Thank you for sharing this take, I am certain I will be visiting this world over and over again throughout the years, God willing!
This is my second or third time reading this but it's still as wonderful as ever. Keep up the great work.
This was one of the best stories I've read on this site.
A story, with messages in there, well written and an utter delight to consume.
Thank you.
Emotionally satisfied, as one anon put it, is a very fitting description.
The final line is kind of an emotional climax.