All Comments on 'A Slow Work Day'

Good premise.

But rushed.

Nothing on the way of preliminaries before she takes his cock in her mouth?

Nothing with her breasts? She doesn't bare them before the blowjob? And tease him with them? And show him how sensitive her nipples are by playing with them herself?

She doesn't ask him to eat her pussy a bit before fucking?

She doesn't play with his cock and balls, edging him?

And, you wrote: "...but she enjoyed what I think Americans call my moxy." It's MOXIE.

Four stars.

but she enjoyed what I think Americans call my moxy

That was a lot of fun! Not too excited about straight sex or big cocks, but I do love an intimidating fem and Toby's dynamic with her was very pleasant. They were cute. All the jokes and bits and non-jokes and pushes and prods—nicely executed. I'd read more of these two if that's on the table. The atmosphere was nice, too. Thanks for sharing!

The first sentence was a grammatical train wreck. Didn't bother with the rest.

Who goes to Newcastle even if it's not raining? Good bit of a fun shag

"I'd been working at a hotel in Newcastle which will remain nameless for a few weeks when I first met Devon."

Yeah, OK.

@Rambling_Chantrix yeah I was kinda challenging myself a bit on that front -- it's never really been something I've found super appealing so I wanted to see if I could still produce something whose end result I could be happy with!

@Anonymous you're probably right about it being a bit rushed -- I thought about there being more build-up but I enjoyed the idea of it being in Devon's character to just go straight to 11. Teasing more might have derailed the whole idea that, to her, fucking to pass the time is obvious, you know? As for the moxie thing, well, he's an awkward lad who clearly didn't know himself. Spare him the condemnation :P

Loved it. Little teasing then straight fuck. A lot of times in my opinion people waste so much time on the build up to the actual fuck, it kills it.

Excellent. Exciting, so true......blokes so want a girlfriend like Devon, naughty and full of fun. Its great being young, but then honestly its been great being older, just depends how uptight you are.

Keep writing Skringle, you are very good. 5

Brilliant story!