All Comments on 'A Slut's Filthy Desire'

Asylum, thank you for your first story. You have a good base here. I'm going to suggest that often less is more with description. You're a bit purple prose-ee throughout . Not everything described needs to be above average in some way. Also, once you have described something as superior, you don't need multiple additional superlatives. (Okay. He has a big dick.)

Who are they to each other? Spouse, SO, fuck buddies, Craigslist hookups? Fantasy is great for stretching reality, but I must say...long before 4 hours I would have no longer been interested in getting off, just getting him off of me. What happened to the bath and wine? :'-/

Keep writing and posting. It's the best way to improve.

keep making submissions.