All Comments on 'A Small Mistake, Big trouble Ch. 11'

by jerseyblue

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tompo296tompo296almost 9 years ago
Super Series

This has been a great series, well told and erotic. I do hope that there is more to come.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
character changes

When you shift from one character to another, try giving some sort indication of the change. Whether it is a reference in the first sentence of the paragraph or maybe an asterisk in the margin it will eliminate a lot of confusion for the reader.

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