All Comments on 'A Strange Compulsion Ch. 03'

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You've got 2 great stories going here, carry on luv um.

Fantastic story! Love it!

What the hell are magnanimous breasts?

Rebekah. Thanks for a great story, but was confused with the switch from Jason to Ryan back to Jason... I'm surprised your editor missed that catch, but keep on writing!

Great story up to the ending..the ending was terrible !!

So you got yourself an editor? Great! But I think you might need another one. He missed some fairly obvious mistakes. Others have pointed them out already, so I’m not going to beat a dead horse. Also, a good editor should be able to suggest a larger vocabulary for your descriptions, i.e. ‘cock’- prick, dick, penis, rod, manhood, etc, etc. Try expanding your vocabulary so your story isn’t repetitive. It’ll help keep your readers interested.

Why are women whose thoughts he can sense and read able to keep secrets from him? You are being a bit inconsistent in terms of what his abilities are.

If I'd been the author, either Mrs Ford wouldn't have noticed the wedding picture on the desk or she would have left it, so it would have been right there next to her in the video while she fucked a student.

where did his mind reading and control powers go? it's almost like he never had them