All Comments on 'A Strong Family Bond Ch. 02'

And it reads like a poorly performed play, in which the actors over-exaggerate their gestures and milk their lines. That might have been okay if you were going for an ironic vaudevillian theme, but it doesn't look like you intended it to be ironic. And it isn't just the dialog: nothing about this story draws me in. It's clinically one-dimensional.

Because I could have used more ridiculous material to laugh at. These characters are one dimensional and the plot is so thin. There's no substance and clearly no planning put into this as if you wrote on the spot and published without checking if it even made sense. Where's your credibility, or pride, even?

These are the very definition of ‘short, short stories’. I’m still looking forward to more, so please continue this series!