All Comments on 'A Super Halloween'

Claudia sounds like a lot of fun.

Good premise.

Well written. But an editor/proofreader would help.

You wrote: "The shoulder straps where wider and ruffled..." You meant WERE, not WHERE.

And on page 2 where you're talking about them both having condoms, you wrote FATC when you meant FACT.

Well structured story.

Lacking, however, are all the details of what they did to/with each other. And some dialog about how it felt to the one doing and the one receiving. Some conversation/s about whether what one was doing to the other was good? Could it be better? How? Harder? Softer? Faster? Slower?

A bit of titty fucking might have been nice. And, perhaps some ass play.

Could have been five stars. Four.

Part 2?

good romance

Good solid story. Could have been romance but think you had it orrdctly categorised as it was hot and sexy, but could be heading towards romance in a sequel.

A couple of typos and stereotypes on Claudia, but it was nice. Put fake breasts in a more realistic, if still a bit glorified, light.

This was a fun read ... just the way it is. I saw a couple of typo glitches that didn't interfere with the storyline. A second pair of eyes might have caught those. Sometimes, it helps to read one's story aloud - it slows the mind a bit and helps pick up those typos and word glitches, though not so much with homophones, I've found. The dialogue and descriptions were good, not overly done - they flowed naturally for the characters involved. It was humous to note those doing the walk of shame the morning after. I rate this five stars.

Thanks for a pleasant read. I missed the Halloween event stories. So I selected this one as my introduction to your stories. As to a follow-on story with the characters - that's totally up to your muse. I'm happy just where this story ends.

Looking forward to returning the cape, lol