All Comments on 'A Super Human Among Us'

There was a televison series some years ago on cbs which this story bear a close resemblence to in many of its detail. Like many stories I like it die a quick death.

Short sentence. Next short sentence. Another short sentence. Somehow, this is very boring and annoying to read. A bit more STYLE would help a great deal, especially since you seem to want to actually tell a story.

This story, not the sex part, sounds like a series on tv where a character played by John Goodman get hit by a subway train and his brain is removed and put in a younger body with super abilities. His wife and daughter thinks he is dead. Dude make up your own stories.

somehow i couldn't get into the characters. they seemed wooden. i think it was the relentless 3rd person.