All Comments on 'A Talking Fantasy Turns Real'

well done...hope to see more stories from you...

...but I think it'd be better if you added more sexual description. "...then we were ready to go again. After the second time, we had no energy left..." just doesn't cut it.

I think the rushed ending added a sense of reality to the story. As if the author was retelling a true event. It would be great if a follow on story involving these four related their developing sexual relationship. Just an idea. Thank you for the time and effort you took composing the story. Much appreciated..

A tale well told. Enjoyed it immensely. Descriptive. Not trite and cliche in any way.

Hope to see more.

Great first story.....please continue

A little too brief in some parts, like you were telling the story to a friend. But a great first effort, looking forward to more from you.

Congratulations on your first post!

Plenty of need in LW for GOOD sex descriptions like this (lots of boring Tab A in Slot B stuff). Two very good initial stories so far. Would like to see more story development. You have the writing skills and descriptive skills as a good base for adding more complete (not necessarily longer) stories. Thanks for writing.

I really like a story that builds up the atmosphere - not some unlikely instant banging. This did it for me!

Four good friends just got a little closer. Reads like a good time. She might of been a bit pushy, but I'm being picky. She is a organizing ly good cummer....