All Comments on 'A Teddy Bear for Christmas'

This is your second very romantic story, after No Tan Lines. Please keep writing wonderful romances.

Lovely story, beautifully told.

Thank you, Chloe. To disappear into a story so full of being loved and appreciated at so many levels was a great pleasure! I believe that you speak to the universality of our longings, the needs of our hearts. Bravo!

Awesome

5 Stars on a great Story . You are a great writer keep up the Great work . I hope you are working on when they meet the families ?

So much detail, and a compelling story line. I have found my new favorite author. Looking at your story list, I can see a months worth of reading to do. Love at first sight, as my wife, of 42 years, and I are a testament to that. Thank you, and keep up the writing.

Today you quoted a comment of mine on breast sizes in the Author's Hangout. Something made me check out your story list and bio. I'm so glad I did. I picked this story simply because it came first alphabetically. You are the writer I aspire to be, but that's a long way off. There is no way I could write an eight page story about a single evening and make it compelling, romantic, moving and exquisitely sexy. I am in awe. It's like I've discovered a treasure trove of stories and I intend to indulge myself. Thank you. Oh, and us petite gals have to stick together.🙂

xxx KD.

Superb!

very romantic, liked it,,not what im usually into,,,, loving wives and erotic couplings are my go to;s..

Wonderful 5 stars again! Liked the way he made love to her! Not like Nick in Fingerprints. I believe in love at first sight. I do wish I, we, could have enjoyed Teddy meeting her family, that would have been a TRIP!

BTW I love your quotes, beautiful words!

Childhood ….. growing peaceful is the most precious gift , next to health, we can receive …. The semen planted in our mind and soul while growing up are our guidelines and those will be held responsible for our being ….. so Sara’s fears and pain have been planted and been growing into big trees ….. ow it needs a talented gardener to successful cut them down

Lovely tale 💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨🇧🇹🇧🇹🍀

Romances? As well as this and "No Tan Lines," try "My Valentine," "September Blue," and "Tales from Old Shanghai." All romances in their own way. "Fingerprints on my Heart," maybe, and "Just One Last Dance" as well, altho none of the last 4 are classic happy romances.

I was on my way to re-read No Tan Lines for the umpteenth time -- it's a wonderful romance. So is this, Different due to his love at first sight, although you could say the same, almost, about that. Please keep writing wonderful romance-first stories. 5-star

Clearest description ( for a male ) of the female reception, during the act. Thankyou for that.

A very nice story.

It was nice though a bit drawn out/slow.

My wife is Asian so I know just how your interior talk was so absolutely beautiful and true. It would have been a wonderful story even without the super hot sex.

Fantastic! ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

This is just a great, great story. Not just sex, but real sadness & real joy. Just lovely.

been reading this site for awhile now. not for the sex but seeking the enjoyment provided that eminates from talented writing. this work was an exceptional piece in all facets, even the sex. congratulations for creating such a wonderfully introspectful, touching story. thank you.

Very nice story! I have seen nice Asian girls get tormented like that-- even defended one once from some evil girls. This was nice to read.

What a sweet love story with plenty of hot lovin' as a bonus. It is a very non-traditional series of events but I would buy into it as a participant just as I did as a reader.

What a wonderful story! You are such a great writer. Not a wanna be. I could feel Sara's emotions throughout my entire being. Would very much like know how Christmas goes at her parents and what happens next. A part two would be wonderful.

Just so y’a no…

Even though you probably cut back on the wailing over Kevin and her sad life, it was too much for me and I started to skim over it. That’s why I dropped a star.

But I loved the story.

The pacing of the first love scene was wonderful.

Thankyou, Chloe.

doneastwest.

Love your work!!! Artistry in words, thank you author.

Perfect story, love you Chloe.

This story needs a different ranking system. 🤩⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Very good romantic story, and a very long erotic coupling. Your descriptions of the love and the sex were very nice. I like this story much better than your LW Happy Birthday story that one kind of needed an ending involving some payback to the husband, Keep writing.

One comment, in place of labial lips try vaginal lips. They work and they taste just as good. A bit overly descriptive but written with conviction and a pleasure to read. It was easy to follow your train of thought all through so any minor errors slipped by without notice. I will definitely watch out for more of your writings. You're a favorite of mine now. Thanks for sharing.

I not enough nstars to vote with. This is a thoroughly enjoyable story, one that i liked very much.

Well written story!! Five Stars

Great story. Great emotion.

5-star effort.

Hooked

An enormous story. You write so well, bringing the reader right inside the feelings of the protagonist, the pain of loneliness and rejection, the joy of unbounded love. Thank you for sharing.

He Gains her trust because he wants her trust, not because he wants her body. She wants love, and can hardly credit when she finds it. No exploitation , no deceit, just a wonderful relationship.

The variety of the stories, the descriptive writing and the details all make Chloe by far my favourite author. This one is another gem

Love that story, and my pinay wife love it as Well haha, Seriously thank you :D

我钟意你嘅古仔克洛伊·张。

I have read a few of your stories now and I am so impressed with your writing, such variety, with satisfying endings, humour and pathos, very sexy too where it's supposed to be.

OUTSTANDING. I need to log in and tell you again!

The romance and the sex were both written well. I wished for her that her thoughts of Kevin hadn't intruded so much, but of course if he hadn't completely kicked her legs out from under her, she wouldn't have vulnerable to Teddy. Nice work.

I knew I was going to enjoy this story when I saw the word 'gweilo' (I spent several years in Hong Kong a long time ago and remember a little Cantonese). And I laughed at Sara's description of brown-nose Kevin. First story of your's I've read, Chloe, and I thoroughly enjoyed it---brilliantly written. I could feel poor Sara's pain and then her joy, Mom's surprise at daughter bringing home a gweilo. I would like to have known a bit more about Teddy (what his career was etc) but hell, can't have everything. All in all, my accidental finding of this story was serendipity.

Maybe a little heavy on the emotional side, but I'm a guy so I guess that's OK. One minor comment about the exquisitly clean grammar: I saw "too" instead of "to" a couple times.

Keep up the good work1

I really enjoyed the characters and the story line. I have to admit that her internal dialogue makes me dizzy. With my male brain I felt like I was plugged into the internal functions of the female brain and felt overwhelmed with all the varied emotions and thoughts the female of the species can process in a nanosecond. I had to force my patience to take it in, often needing to go back an reread sections to get it all. It’s like information overload, like drinking from a fire hydrant. But I loved it. 5* from me!

Outstanding, thanks from Australia

Very well written. It left me with a great insight into Sara's character and her inner struggles. The transition from deep dispair to exquisite joy as the story unfolded, I found myself wondering when the bubble would burst! But it didn't. It turned out to be a great "feel good" story I couldn't put down. You're the best Chloe.

Arguably a little bit mawkish in part but great fun nevertheless.

Just a small irritation; the plural of gweilo does not need an apostrophe, gweilos is fine.

I do not recall ever audibly laughing at a story in Literotica before, but that comment title quote, Chloe, caught me completely off-guard and I could not help it.

Alright, there may be some repetition at times as others have said, but that, as I saw it, fit with Sara's state of mind.

Yes, there were some spelling (or word choice: "teaming" vice "teeming") errors, some misuse of apostrophes ("gweilos" means more than one gweilo, "gweilo's" indicates that something belongs to a gweilo, and "gweilos' " - although not used here - indicates something belonging to more than one gweilo), and other assorted minor mistakes, but very few compared to so many Lit stories.

None of them either detracted or distracted from the charm and eroticism of your tale, and there were some absolutely brilliant creative phrases within that described things perfectly, and often with clever humour.

I especially enjoyed the cultural differences and viewpoints, which truly makes your stories (this being the third of yours that I have savoured - I discovered you late in life and have embarked upon a catch-up programme) stand out from the rest here.

A solid five from me.

And, yes, a sequel is mandatory.

M

A really good story, wished it continued with the Christmas day visit.

Really appreciate all the wonderful comments - thank you every one of you. It means a lot to me that you took that time to let me know what you thought of my little story.

This is, without a doubt, one of my all-time favorite stories on Literotica. I'm not normally a huge fan of "insta-love" stories, but this one just worked for me. (And honestly, the haircut scene was harder to believe for me than the instant relationship. But maybe that's because I'm ultra-picky about my hair.) Teddy is a complete doll, and seeing Sara move from Kevin (who, let's face it, she already KNEW was a loser) to Teddy was sweet and didn't require too much suspension of disbelief at all. The only thing I would have liked was a little more background on Teddy - clearly he was a successful business professional, but he was a bit of a mystery character in some ways. But, I still loved the story and will be working my way through your other stories. Thanks for this one!

Hi Chloe, I'm so glad I found your stories amazingly well wrtiien. Thank you xx

Don't listen to that anon although I had to suspend a little belief the story was very good just what I needed after a bit of depression creeping in. Really liked it a little sappy but sometimes that's what you need well done very vivid. And btw what a classy response to that second rate anon thanks for the story much appreciated.

I realize this is all fantasy, but in order to really enjoy a story there has to be a certain amount of believability. I cannot believe that a woman would go from being devastated about being dumped to full on sex, love and acceptance of a proposal all within 24 hours. Maybe raunchy revenge sex, but not this. She could have fucked him, then let the rest develop over time.

I’m frustrated I cannot vote you as a Favorite Author after each deserving story. Just the stars is limiting my praise. You are emotionally gifted and it floods your prose. It also floods my pleasure appreciating your intelligent, insightful, passionate story telling. Those who know you (wish I did) are so blest!

And a big hug for you too. May you find some first rate stories on Literotica soon.

A real second rate story.

The author is so good at describing loving sex and the emotions of the two involved at the time. Teddy was very likable. What woman would not love a brawny lad who can do hair and make up? But he had no problem making a commitment, a stumbling block for a lot of guys (including Kevin).

I've just discovered 'Chloe' and it took me three sessions to get through this story. Quite a long one (my first of yours). You had me in tears a few times I have to admit. Very touching, very moving.

I too like a happy ending and I agree with FurryFace, I expected tosspot Kevin had dumped her on Christmas Eve for another girl.

Anyway, a lovely story, very well told.

Thanks for sharing.

PS. I had to look up 'gweilo'.

I can always tell when a story is going to make worthwhile reading by the style of the first few paragraphs. This was very well written, and you show exceptional talent for putting together a story that is both interesting and a pleasure to read.

I get tired very quickly of any offering that launches too quickly into lots of crude and graphic sex. This story was exceptional in that the characters were developed well in the early stages and I found myself hating the 'brownnose asshole' Kevin very early on. I was half expecting to have learned that he had stood Sara up for another girl - nothing to do with work at all.

If I could criticise this at all, it would be that I felt some of the explanations and descriptions were quite repetitive, and the whole thing could have been a bit shorter. For example, stating and re-stating, over and over that Kevin was Chinese and knew how important meeting Sara's parents would be for her. But that's only my personal view, and it didn't really spoil my enjoyment of the story. Still gets 5 stars from me.

So - Thanks Chloe for a very enjoyable story.

FF.

You have a way with words that instill feelings.

And it's damned good

Once again you have crafted a beautiful story Chloe. Keep up your great work. Roger Hales

Thank you for the beautiful story!!

I have recently found your stories Chloe and they are amongst the best here. Arousing, but tender and passionate too with a proper story behind them. Please keep writing :)

A sequel as they come to know each other would be great

Sorry for the rhyming title but it so encapsulates my feelings. I thought the Strawberry series was great - and I still “so waiting for so lovely and talented esteemed authoress to continue so giggly and politically incorrect story” - but this one was just what I needed for this Christmas season.

From one Chinese Chick (tm) to another - I love your writing and only wish I could find a diabolical way to streal your talent.

I love that it had a good story line and not just a sex filled orgy Thank you

Hot story! Loved every part of it. Nice build up also!

To anyone who thinks the story develops slowly or repeats thoughts, Sara's years of disappointment, starved self-esteem, and doubts about her desirability are not easily overcome. And cultural-familial pressures can be daunting! To have her easily morph from the young lady sitting on the bar stool to a very different view of herself, giddy with happiness, would not be realistic. But "love at first sight" is a very real thing.

A sweet guy friend confessed to walking in a room and being so drawn to a young lady, for reasons he could not explain, that his main thought was of marrying her... and he eventually did.

I have a step-daughter with a broken self image. She claims to be OCD, but she acts to those interacting with her as if she is partly 7-9 years old, both in actions and words.

The story resonated with me, although I'm male, because when I was younger I too had self image problems. They don't really go away unless you can look at you as an adult, not through your biased younger eyes - if you know what I mean.

I hurt at her loss of face, there are no other words for it.

There was too much repetition, in paragraphs and words. It was also sweet and sexy.

A very human story. Now I have a new favorite writer. Thank you Chloe. I look forward to reading more of your work. I especially would like to compliment you on your dialog. It flows so, so naturally. Can I give you more than 5 stars?

Don

Many people in the world have been like Sara.

Glad to see someone looking to turn it around for a change.

Very well written. A little longer than I'm used to reading but you kept my attention. Few writers do that. I like the first person perspective, gives more insight into the character. And Sara is a very interesting character. Honest with herself, with a touch of confidence and a little twinge of self-doubt. Your insights into her mind were very well done and really breathed life into her as much as the dialogue. The sex was erotic, realistic and romantic. Teddy is one to keep. And the phone call at the end with Mom was the perfect twist to end on. Very well done.

The description and details were written quite well

On another note- I felt I had so much in common with Sara ...

Oh, Sara is having a total emotional breakdown at that point and just going thru how she sees herself and all her insecurities are coming out. She's not a people person at all and she doesn't see herself as attractive at all even tho she is, but she's seeing herself thru the lense of other peoples perceptions of her over the years and it's going to take Teddy to help her see the real Sara.

" I'm not beautiful at all. I'm skinny and my boobs are too small and my butt's non-existent and I've got a flat nose and my eyebrows are all wrong and my feet are too big and I can't do social chit-chat to save my life and I annoy everyone I work with coz I'm too smart and I don't know how to be nice about it when they're wrong and I always say the wrong thing at the wrong time and I haven't got any friends anymore coz they're all married and busy with their husbands and kids and they were never really friends anyhow," - Whoa there, where did this came from?

I thought your attention to detail, especially in the love scenes was well done. Thanks.

What a great story told with empathy and care. You craft a good story. Thank you. I hope to read more of yours - the pages went by quick, and I was sad to see the story end.

I always find sloppily written stories from a guys point of view with little to no backstory. This is one the rare good ones on here from a girls point of view that includes romance and feeling in the writing where as most stories are just 'She saw me in the bathroom and we fucked like bunnies'

Favorite story so far.

A wonderful story. Yes, I could relate to the experience of your main character. What I also enjoyed tremendously was the well written aspects of spelling and grammar. So seldom seen and experienced on this free site. Many thanks.

Stories have natural ends... but I did wonder about what happened at the family Christmas plus when she returned to work and Keven got to see her after her "makeover". Plus, of course the effect of the new her with her work collegues etc.

Something to think about? A part Two?

Its called "The Wolf with the Red Roses" and you can find it by clicking on my userid and going to my stories. Its also in the Valentines story competition. It's a First Time story but this time I submitted it in the Mature category as its an older guy with a young chinese girl.

Hi Chloe, this was the first of your stories for me and I'm glad I found it. I enjoyed it and am going back to find your earlier work. 5 stars from me!

you developed your characters, created a good story amd wrapped it up nicely- thank you foe such a beautiful story.

You captured me at: "Kevin was as past tense as a guy could be."

Thank you for the wonderful story. A woman discovers love and her sexuality. Well written, believable, and sensual. As always, Chloe's story paints the pictures, and always the reader into the mind of her character.

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Hi Chloe. I enjoyed your story. I'm pleased you put this in the First Time category rather than Interracial or I may not have read the story. Not because I have an issue with interracial relationships, I have been in an interracial relationship for 26 years. Skin colour or race matter not to me, its about holding a girl in your arms and loving her. I enjoyed the passion and hope you will continue the story detailing the learning process of the new lovers, as she is getting to know other sexual positions and how to please him. Not much was said about Teddy other than his reference to his mother and sisters, is his character going to be filled out in the next story. Overall I enjoyed the story and it had a positive effect on me, looking forward to reading more, thanx for writing, season’s greetings.

I’ll just add having read some of the feedback you received. I have read other stories on this site with bad grammar and dialogue which have made me stop reading because its hard work or the writing does not flow smoothly, but if there are minor mistakes I continue reading. Reading these stories it is about connecting and understanding the story being told, thinking and imagining, creating the scene in your mind. If readers are upset or offended by small errors, by the wrong use of “to” and “too” then their motives for reading must be questioned. Everything in life has little flaws, people, objects and stories. A well balanced person can enjoy and love without letting flaws detract from life. Too many people are happy to put others down and point out their mistakes, just let these negative remarks float away as they have little substance. Really enjoyed your story.

Steve.

Kept getting lost in the repetiveness. Once you've told me unless there is a reason to bring it back up, say in the last page - let it be. I had to lay it down and pick it back up several times to get through it. You worked hard at writing so I felt since I chose it is owed you to read it and give you honest feedback. Cheers!

I add my vote with everyone else. Please continue the story and let us see Sara blossom into her potential with her new love. I would love to read of her getting pregnant with Teddy, wow.

Loved the story, 5 stars, but I'd like to see a continuation where we don't see her emotionally fragile. I'd like to see where this goes and how their relationship evolves where she's not on the edge of a breakdown to being in love. Great story, well written! Keep it up

Loved it.

I just couldn't get through the first two pages. It was way too repetitive. We get it, she's not too pretty and not too ugly. She's going to be embarassed facing her family. Kevin's Chinese, he understands Chinese families. Keep the story moving along.

CHOLE I've been waiting for ch8 of hayley so baddddddddddddddddddddd

I love your stories, such a huge turn on :)

Have an awesome day !

As so many have said you are a very talented writer. I also believe that you have a very good base story started here and with a little more pre story on Sara and then let them continue on with their journey. I think you could turn this into a Nicholas Sparks type story. Unfortunately you would have to cut a lot of the descriptive sex.

I'd like to say I enjoyed this story, but I can't. Because "like" would be *MASSIVE* & *VAST* understatement, to put it mildly. I'm a lifelong reader having read probably close to 1,000 books over the years, and this story ranks right up with the best that I have ever read. If you could take a story like this, ease off on the sex, stretch it into a novel length & get it published, I think you'd have a very big seller on your hands, and maybe even the start of a career as a professional writer. Note: I have no affiliation with any publishing firm / agency or the like, but I know what I like and this I *LOVE*. I apologize for only giving this 5 stars but the rating system doesn't go high enough for an appropriate rating. Even a 1-100 scale doesn't go high enough.

Sara? Yes, the idea I had in my mind was that when she was younger, she was one of those nerdy girls who is socially very awkward and thru no fault of her own doesn't dress like her peers and has no idea how to make herself look more attractive - very earnest and very academically smart but socially clueless. Big square glasses, ties her hair back, can't talk back or chat, doesn't get jokes .... but as Teddy sees, she actually is rather beautiful in her own way but has no idea until Teddy shows her what she can look like and draws her out.

Teddy sees the "real" Sara, and understands her - it's one of those "instantaneous" connections that sometimes happen between two people that just click - and looking ahead, Teddy will give her the self-confidence she needs so much, as well as that knowledge that she is loved for herself that she wants and needs to feel. I'm kind of looking forward to when she meets Kevin after the New Year....

I hadn't really been planning a sequel when I wrote this, but you're not the only person to say that. I'll put it on the list coz thinking about it, I'd like to know what happens over Christmas with Teddy and Sara and Sara's family as well. And what about when Sara meet's Teddy's family? I think the sequel will be rather more humorous but just as romantic. Hot sex and cultural misunderstandings - the potential is just so good - and I speak from experience here - polish/chinese/vietnamese-american with an italian-american partner ... anyhow, on the list but no guarantees on timing. I always take longer than I think I will and I have a backlog I'm working on now and a thousand ideas for stories.....

If you want another of my Christmas stories, Strawberry Chapter 4 is another one (it's not in the competition tho, I wrote it before the competition opened). It's a lot different to this - a lot funnier to start with, and Strawberry is a totally different girl, - but her boyfriend is taking her to visit his family just north of Duluth for Christmas - anyhow, if you liked this, take a look at Strawberry Chapter 4.

A lovely beginning! I hope we get to see Teddy meet Sara's rather large extended family for the holidays, perhaps in a future sequel. I'd also be interested to know more about Teddy - we has giving me Bruce Wayne vibes, for some reason.

I got the impression that Sara was the kind of girl who was / is pretty and attractive, but was never told so, believed it was so, or shown it was so.

I hate what most of these wanna be morons call stories. This is a work of art in that it captures a little bit of the essence called "being human". I really wonder if you pulled this one from a little bit of your past because you captured it so wonderfully.

I do not visit this site much because the clips are so mundane.

However, you can be sure I will look forward to looking for your stories when I do return.

Thanks Chloe

This is certainly the best story I have read here, and the best I have read for a long time. I found myself remembering the first time I said "I love you" to my wife, eighteen years ago.

Thank you.

This story was outstanding!!! The only thing that I could find fault in was that it ended way to soon!!! Really looking forward to reading a Chapter 2 - Teddy meets Sara's family.

and this is just my personal take on it.

1) I felt the scenes where a) she was feeling sorry for herself and realizing Kevin really didn't care for her and b) where she kept on telling Teddy she didn't want to be hurt by him, went on a bit too long. I do understand she's a bit neurotic, considering all the unhappy experiences she's had, but reading the same thoughts over and over again seemed overkill - I'd cut it by a quarter to a third.

2) Would have liked the story to continue until she met her family - and how they reacted to Teddy. I have no doubt Teddy would be a perfect gentleman, but I'd imagine her parents and siblings would give him a pretty lengthy grilling - to make sure he's right for her. I'd imagine it would be pretty humorous.

Still, the perfect kind of story for the winter season!