All Comments on 'A Town Called Eclipse'

Outstanding story!

You did it again .Another masterpiece .I really enjoy your stories thank you .

P.S. you forgot to tell us where to find the other stories in this group :)

I am glad you enjoyed this one. It was a blast to write. The other stories are scattered among the different story types. I don't think there is a link to all of them. I will look and see though.

If you go into the NEW link there is a link to all the other stories. Please partake of the other stories and support the other authors.

You came through just as I knew you would. There is a story page with links to all the other stories. It is here:

https://www.literotica.com/s/literotica-writers-go-west-full-story-list

Thank you again for contributing this great story, Randi.

I couldn't buy into your story. I didn't rate it.

Boyd Percy

You took the challenge and came up aces. You are a huge talent, and I knew I wouldn't go wrong asking you for a Western. Great story, and I am very grateful. Randi.

When you copy the link, be sure you delete the space in the middle of "writers!"

I was thrilled to be invited for this event. I had a blast writing this and grew up with the weird west show 'Wild Wild West'. I hope everyone had a great holiday and enjoyed time with friends and family. Thanks again Randi!!

Great story, couldn't stop until I finished it. Enjoyed the combination of characters and elements. Nice addition to the wild west collection.

That was stellar!

Only thing I noticed is you can Monika Mary once.

On page two Tara knows who Jules Verne is and even credits him for giving her the idea for the digging machine "I had asked her if she had ever read any Jules Verne and she giggled. It was in fact his novel, Journey to the Center of the Earth, that had inspired the digging machine", but on page six she has no idea who he is and claims she only reads the work of other scientist "Jules Verne would be proud." I said, and she looked at me puzzled. "He is a human author." "Ah, I don't read anything other than works published by other scientists. I don't have time for silliness."

It’s a nice mash-up if LOTR races with the American Wild West. Lots of action - sometimes a bit too fast without enough explanation. Sometimes a character is shot dead almost out of nowhere.

My other suggestion, writing-wise, is to vary sentence sentence more. Include longer, more complex sentences and a few very short ones. If you throw it into a text analyzer, you’ll find your sentence length is remarkably constant and that’s not like natural speech in which we have thoughts and give explanations and commands with more and less detail at different times.

Out - Fucking - Standing