All Comments on 'A Tragic Incident'

This is so bad that I can't even leave a comment that I can put into words.!

You have the framework for something absolutely amazing here. This is way to rushed, needs a lot of detail, and some editing. But you do show potential at least

Agree with Can't Obviously the age factor has kicked in & fucked up your mind

I agree with Potential. The story needed more detail to add to the progression. The concept was good, but there seems to be too much emphasis on specific events and it felt like the story was rushed to completion. You needed to lengthen the storyline to allow for the gradual progression of events that would have permitted the reader an opportunity to build a stronger relationship with the characters.

Brother/sister tales are really my most favorite and this one was really very good. Thank you for your stories. Please keep writing in this genre.

this is just a rewrite of A TRIVIAL OCCURENCE. you took the advice to add conflict and just added it to an existing story not the best way to write a story use new fresh ideas instead of the same old ones

DBRS

A tender story of love and tender affection.

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