All Comments on 'A Tribesman's Fate'

This is a very good start to an interesting storyline and one I hope that you continue to its conclusion.

However, it seems to me that English is not your first language and as a consequence your choice of words, sentence construction and grammar are poor. This does detract from your story, and is quite irritating.

One major aspect of writing - besides others - is to improve my language skills. It would be easier in my own tongue though less challenging and educating.

I apologize that it is still so bad it distracted you. Though I know I will hardly ever compete with a native english person I promise I'll try to improve.

Hopefully you'll find the next one more enjoyable.

For me it is already a huge step forward to try and get even published.

I sincerely thank you for your feedback and advice.

It is an interesting story. Your English shall improve with every story you write.

Especially for a non native English speaker. I was able to follow the events and characters and am satisfied with the result. I like the descriptions and historical details of ancient Rome, not to mention the sex itself. All in all, 5 stars.