by Reiner43
Just that it was a wonderful story. When life takes a turn, in a surprising way.
Probably because the nameless stud in this story took care of all the willing women! Wow, I'd say he is about the luckiest stiff (pun intended) around. Lucky? Yes, definitely--getting it on with your female Sunday school teacher isn't something every guy can brag about.
Great story. I see there's another chapter, which I'm eager to read.
I'm a thinking that you have just droped this young man in Valhalla. Great story!!!
The story was fairly easy to read in spite of minor goofs. It seemed like an actual story not just another amateur attempt at a porno script. I like the guy's appreciation of the female anatomy and his shunning of backdoor explorations. Keep that up and continue to explore the fertility angle if possible and you'll have a fan.
Outstanding storyline that flowed quite nicely in an eloquent and enticing format that keeps the reader wanting more. The descriptive sex education theme throughout the beginning chapters also spiced up the story rather well.
I felt some kinship with the protagonist(we NEVER did find out his name!), since I also had the chance to have a 42 y. old mistress when I was 25. Did she ever teach me a thing or two!
Thanks for this very nicely done work.
Smashing debut. Well written and sure to have broad appeal. Genres in LIT are necessary, I suppose, but they do not do service to a story such as yours; although I'll admit that if one category had to be chosen "Mature" is the one. In any event I look forward to your further work. Best regards, Kal
Fantastic effort! Hope you have plans for many more stories because you are very good at character deveopment quickly and I appreciate that.
Blake
sequel! Heck with breaking it into smaller chapters - certainly managed to keep my attention! :) BUT, I want to find out happens next - does it get serious with Louisa or.... Another great job! Thanks
but breaking it into a couple of chapters would have been better, great otherwise. :)
well written. I have read many 'first time' stories and they were all about how fing good the male was or how big he was or how happy he made her. this story kept my complete interest and the story line seemed so natural, so real. please keep writing
Your writing about doing things nice and easy is refreshing, to say the least. Not just a wham - bam, thank you maam that some people think is the only way to write a story. Looking to seeing more from you in the future. Keep up the good work.
Ghostwriter48