by ronron1818
This was so hard to categorize, and hard to rate. It was interesting a 3 to see where you took the premise. I gave it a 3 because it seemed to finish too quickly.
I’m also not sure about the accuracy of your science, but it is a fantasy of sorts.
I actually thought it was funny...too bad there was no real ending.
It was very funny I'll give you that.
He can cum but not orgasm? Yep, funny.
When I read it for some reason I read it with an Asian accent. Funny that.
I gave you 4 stars. I like the theme of the story a lot. It was extremely erotic. That was worth 5 stars, but I wasn’t crazy about how it was written. So that was a 3. I think being more descriptive and getting your reader into the scene would have added tremendously to how people react. Seemed too rushed.
Love it. Hope he has to wait way longer for his next release. A sequel would be nice.