All Comments on 'A Valentine for Ian'

Fantastic short story.

Good premise.

Sex moves along much too fast, though.

Needs to be slowed down. Needs dialog with her asking him about his masturbation fantasies about her. What did/does he imaging doing to/with her? What did/does he imagine her doing to/with him?

How does he like her tits?

How does he like her pussy? Shaved? Trimmed? Hairy?

Does he smell her panties? Does he like the smell? Would he like to smell her fingers? Taste them?

Four stars.

This need more.

needs a follow-up

Love the story! can you add to it?

Great start for a series of stories if you are so inclined.

Don't see "sex moves along much too fast" in the comments very often... Felt a bit like 1/2 a story, with sex to come with the daughter and mother in the second half of the story, in one submission. This seemed like more of a Fetish story frankly.

Ended before it even started. Shame. Had potential.

I truly hope there is more to this story loved it

Great story. I give it 4 out of 5 stars. You should redo this story and add more details. Hopefully there is a part 2.