by unlikelyminx
You have an interesting story, but you lose your reader's attention when you have spelling mistakes in your prose. Please find some advice about the use of adjectives and adverbs. Less is more. You might also want to think about increasing the range of Rhiannon's reactions to difficult information. If she widens her eyes any more, they'll be the size of windmills!
Great story, really. But I can't get over your title.
Either it's A Wolf's Bitch or The Wolves' Bitch
please ignore those that are rude. if they don't offer to help, then let them eat cake.
Can't wait for the next chapters to come. >v< I hope that you update soon. :D Can't wait to see what will happen to Rhiannon and Alec and what's in store for them. :D
So is she being told she will not survive if her 'pups' make it? She will only live if she miscarries? That seems pretty sad. I guess maybe her strength Valencia senses might make her different?? Maybe she'll survive.
Please do more of this i want to read more and see how many pups she is gonna have
Is there going to be a next chapter,,or another,NO ending story,which seems the normal on here anymore,,,it was very good,,,would like to see more,,but not holding my breath,,,
A great story, I gave it 5-STARS. Please Don't do what 80% to 90% of writers of series stories, they DO NOT FINISH THEM!!!89DE
Rhiannon's behavior through out this story is completely unbelievable. So she is fine with being slapped, manhandled, called a bitch and told she is going to be impregnated, then forced to have sex. Then latter told she is quite likely to die because of her pregnancy and she is GLAD!? Because her killer babies daddy will be pleased. And your entire justification for this behavior is his scent and a "strange lust inducing power"?
One: Humans have one of the weakest sense of smells in the animal kingdom and multiple tests have proven that pheromones have little to do with human attraction, and in many cases the pheromones of other animals have a very unpleasant smell to humans.
Two: The strange power just feels like a contrivance so you can get to the action quickly without making it a straight up rape story and/or have her immediately trying to find a way to get his deadly spawn out of her.
I realize this is a fantasy but your using a human woman who is expected even in a fantasy setting to act like a normal human woman and she clearly isn't.
Please please write more! The first chapter was so damn HOT. This one less so, but I still enjoyed the backstory. I really want to see what happens next. And how Alex shows her his appreciation for carrying his litter. More more more!
I keep checking back to see if you finished but still nothing