All Comments on 'Aaron'

I like your ideas, and the story is progressing nicely. That being said it is brutally obvious that English is not your first language. You need an editor to smooth out the grammar and syntax. Keep up the writing because I will be looking for the next installment.

WomEn is MORE than ONE woman while womAn is only one. I believe that is true in English, the world over. The rest was very hard to concentrate on. Please get a proof-reader.

I will never understand why people feel the need to criticise my spelling or grammar when they are nearly always “Anonymous.” If I can’t see their works, to see where I am going wrong it seems pointless. Maybe they are too busy criticising others to actually produce any work. Pleased to hear you both enjoyed story though.

Hello, at one point your lead character becomes Alex.

Not everybody is a writer, nor do some want to be. But if you post a story littered with misspellings and lousy grammar, you deserve criticism.

Yeah, Lit is free, but so are comments. Don't like the comments? Then turn them off.

As far as the anon comments go, that's part of the way things work here. Not everyone has an account, so their posts are anonymous.

Give the sexy Aaron a bit of chest hair -- something sexy and lush that Betty can touch and taste. He sounds like a great catch -- maybe even for Pauline!

Kui mina kunagi armeest koju tulin siis ema ootas mind ukse trepil.Õhtul võtsime emaga veidi veini koju tuleku puhul.Hiljem oli meil jutt naiste teemal ja siis ma suudlesin ema elus esimest korda.Ema oli juba veidi vindine ja hakkas minu püksi augu kallal toimetama mis minule hästi mõnus oli.Sellel õhtul juhtus mul esimest korda kus ma oma ema voodis nikkusin.Pärast oli meil mõlemal rahulolu.

Loved the storyline. Can't wait until the next chapter.

... but what you have here is pretty good. Probably won't be back for future chapters in this story, unless I just stumble on to it.

Why do the authors here seem to parcel the stories out in 1 or 2 page segments. If they posted entire stories in one go, I would give better star counts.

I don’t know if a 50 year old Royal Marine with 32 years of service can put up with 5 screaming kids, a younger girl friend for very long.

Remember, she is also broke with a house to worry about.

I've read several of your stories and all have good story lines, but the grammar is dreadful and off-putting.

We have punctuation called an apostrophie which you never use. For example "mum's" not "mums" and "you're" not "your".

Also you write paragraphs beginning and ending with punctuation marks when there is obviously descriptive text in the middle.

You really need to reread your story several times before publishing.