All Comments on 'Aaron'

Very good story. I like it. 5*****

I enjoyed the story, a decent romance to be sure, to be sure😂

Nice story, but a surgeon in New York makes mega bucks 600k a up vs socialized medicine in Ireland. 300k I’m shocked he did not move back to the USA with his new family. Once established he makes his own way.

It was a good read,but with a lot of the facts were wrong. Another educated damaged mentally wife story. Does Ireland just give a American doctor legal certification. And that swimsuit model. Cop Amelia just want the perfect husband for sex the new women. And the second women waiting for the couple to break up. Aron came across as a stiff as a man .

Nice job, a little Forrest Gumpish which i like

I liked it.

Even though it was a one more crazy/stupid slut wife story.

And despite the writer repeated himself too often.

It simply was a fun read.

Top ratings from me.

I find a lot of the critiques in these comments to be very bizarre. lover1953 wrote the story and designed the characters and events as he saw fit. It's a fine story, with three-dimensional characters, who respond in their own ways.

Very nice story. Easy to read. Thanks for sharing.

thats not a very good doctor if he cant see the mental illness in maddy and try to get her help. but then he is an american doctor. the lawyer stuff was just bad i was half expecting to read i line from him "dude where's my car" i did enjoyed it for what it was though

Good story

Great story thanks for writing it.

Ed

I felt is was marred by the tutorials and labeling the new character’s POV in each section. It feels like watching an old TV sitcom when you had an MC narrate. Meanwhile, back in…. Instead, try illustrating your change of POV by wording in your first paragraph. It will make your story flow better. Actually, write the whole story from an omniscient POV, and let the spoken words in quotes advance the story while the Omniscient narrator sets the scene.

Thanks for writing! I’m anxious to read your next tale!

This was a wonderful story. Easily earns the 5 stars!

Really a good story. Loved how you danced around that the white wife fucked a black man, and got knocked up. Happy ending for Arron. Five stars.

A very enjoyable story I gave five stars, Both the POV changes and the cheating wife thinking the husband would forgive and forget reminds me of a SS06 story. Very well played thanks for sharing with us.

Nice story, a little bit of sex a little excitement for the good doctor a stupid ex, what more could you want? Good writing.

Wife has another man's baby, move to Ireland, raise another man's baby. Solid.

5* Well written Romance. I felt encouraged and refreshed after reading it. Got to check out more of the author's stories.

Well done. 5*

Just a fun little story about life. I especially liked all the small town politics in the background. 5+.

Very good, I enjoyed it. Changing pov is, IMO, a good mechanism when used effectively. You used it very well.

All though I’m getting tired of the black guy always being ready to jump on some willing black cock slut. It’s amazing how many women feel that it’s their right and a man’s job to take care of her and her kids. I’ve seen so many baby mama’s in my life. It’s a shame that she so delusional that she sees herself as the victim. 5*

Good story, excellent read and I prefer your choice of separating the narrators by asterisks and names, It beats having speech all over the place, often unassigned and 'follow-on' comments without even inserting speech marks Great Job, Thank You 5**** and ignore the comments about specific Irish conditions they are superfluous and somewhat silly in places. I would advise doing research on names in specific countries and areas when you write as it gives an air of authenticity to the story but in general it was entertaining and very easy to enjoy, Thank You

I really enjoyed this, it read like a movie set in an Irish village full of 'colourful local characters' all working to one purpose.

It'd probably make a good rom-com with the right casting. Five stars.

Delightful Story. Thank-You!

Outstandingly good! My only caveat is that Maddy is too dumbed down to be credible. Her character would not have spent a year and much money tracking him down only to say “Oops. Well it’s all good you like kids.

Maddie just isn't credible, neither is he with all his life saving, and how many hip and knee replacements he can fit in on anyone day. Still it was a nice tongue in cheek story so I gave it 5*

Good MD's do work insane hours here in USA. One reason both susbstance abuse and divorce rates are so high for them.

Md's in UK and Ireland not so much. I am a fan of the British comedy series "Doc Martin" -- which also started out as a typical loving - cheating - wife subplot.

If you were Hooked1957, you would have Aaron and Maddy reconciling after 20 years. Thank God you didn't go that way.

A little heavy with the delusionally psycho ex, but very entertaining. The end snuck up pretty quick.

Michael J. Fox Movie "Doc Hollywood" .. young hotshot doctor relocating to LA gets stranded in a small Southern town in need of a doctor and falls in love with a young divorcee with a cute kid then settles down to a career as a country doc.

The best part of the whole story is Matilda

Got to say I loved it but that could just be the Irish in me⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Great story!

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Excellent story!

11/10!!!!!

Fantastique...well done.

DOL

Most excellent!! Thanks for a great story, loved it!!

“Maddy's from a fairly large family.”

4 children is a large family?!?

5 stars - second read and I still like it.

Like it every time.

At first I was a little put off by the author's constant back and forth idea character development, but I quickly got used to it and placed a 5th star on the story. I did enjoy the read.

One of the few on-line writers that can emply different voices to tell the story more or less successfully. Many try and fail.

Top-flight writing. Thanks for this excellent, enjoyable story.

Good story. And readers, make sure you check for a pulse on the neck, not the chest 😏

Well done. Wow Maddie was delusional. What sort of moron fails to use protection or a contraceptive when cheating, even if it was for like a year, especially when the guy you are cheating with is himself married with kids and barely scraping by financially. How stupid. And if she was off the pill to you to get pregnant then why fuck around unprotected (or at all) while trying to have a kid? And even stupider is doing it with someone of a different ethnicity where it would be obvious upon seeing the baby, that your husband is NOT the father. Forget her bullshit rationalizations, Maddie was so stupid that it bordered on brain damaged.

I can't STAND this dumb narrative (not your STORY narrative, the idea here):

"She says that if you get to know the baby that you'll get over, as she calls it, 'your hurt' and you'll be fine."

WHY are so many women delusional about that? They're really trying to make it a narrative, publishing articles & crap about how a "real man" would accept it and raise the child. HELL no.

Couple of notes on the store, Laura stops by and meets Aaron and gives him her card right after he treats the guy with severed fingers, but when they speak on the phone then meet for dinner they both talk & act like they haven't met at all. It's not explicit, but the wording is odd. Just something to watch continuity wise.

Also, I'm the type that looks at maps and your geography is wrong. I'm assuming Castleroy is fictitious since the only similar place name is Castletroy, and Castletroy can't be what you're talking about since it's a large suburb of Limerick and has hospitals & such nearby. But you also say, in describing Tralley, "Killarney and Limerick were to the south about an hour or so." Killarney is due south of Tralley about 20-30 minutes, but Limerick is north & east. If you're using real places details matter.

Overall a good story tho!

Your stories have a theme of betrayal by the wife and of the betrayed husband making good and making them regret the betrayal. And the guys seem to buy a motorbike. I am not criticizing you as you write readable stories.

I wonder if this has happened to you? I write TV/CD trans stories as it lets me cope with what I am.

Is that what you are doing?

Very entertaining story. Definitely a 5.

There is never any reason to have more than one first-person narrator. If you feel you need more than one, it just means you chose the wrong voice. You needed third person, but you were too lazy to put in the work it takes for third person. Head-hopping isn't the solution. For the lazy writing, you get a lazy score.

Best story opening ever.

Cracker? 🤣

Met not meet.

Isn’t God normally capitalized?

5 stars

Read this a couple of times and I love it. Maybe some of the narrative was not deep enough however The characters made you feel something about them. Also ending was consistent with the characters, 5/5,

5 stars, wasn't sure who he was going to end up with but just glad it wasn't a reconciliation story. The ex was enjoyed out of touch with reality and I absolutely loved the various first person view points even from the MC's lawyer, fleshes out the story quite well.

Goal, with a hard "G" its what people aim for.

Gaol , with a soft "G" Middle English word which is now spelt jail in most parts of the world, including Great Britain. Its what most people aim to avoid.

A great story. Thank you for your time and effort you put into this little creation.

Unfortunately I suffer very badly from change-itis. I can't actually create anything myself, but I have a deep seated pathological need to change things that already exist. This is not necessarily a negative thing. It helped triple production at a place I worked at.

So please Lover1953 accept this not as a criticism but rather as something we can all laugh at.

I dunno what sort of a meal he had when he had stew and biscuit in Ireland. I have never understood the American use of the word biscuit, nor what it actually pertains to. But in most of the English and French speaking world biscuits are firm to hard little flour based hand held sweet things of various flavours. Maybe in USA you have cooked up another word for these little delicacies.

So did he have chocolate biscuits with his stew?

Or maybe Gingernuts or Digestive? Wine might be ok with stew, but surely not wine biscuits.

Garibaldis would certainly make the meal memorable.

Hobnobs or Custard creams would certainly add some flavour and texture.

Maybe he had some crackers with his stew. Cheddars or Tucs might do the trick.

Cabin Bread would probably be the best tasting of all of them. Well the least offensive anyway.

Oreos go well in Milkshakes I was led to believe till I tasted one. I am certain they would be just as disgusting in stew. Even an Irish stew.

Personally I prefer Yorkshire pud or dumplings, or even a slice of bread or toast. These all help to sop up the juices and make the stew go further.

I must admit to my eternal shame, I have never tried biscuits with stew, Irish or any other sort. Who knows, it might be unexpectedly nice, like a banana and onion sandwich.

But seriously now folks. Thanks for a great story.

Darn. Was rooting for Amelia.

A very good story, even the second time around............................

Liked this, I thought you were very good with how you played this, nice one

Excellent story! I really liked the angle of it happening in Ireland, as well. 5 stars.

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I love the callback to Lilly Tomlin's character Ernestine (from Rowan and Martin's Laugh-In) with:

"one ringy dingy...two ringy dingy...three ringy dingy..."

11/10!!!!!

A 5-star literary masterpiece. I couldn't put the book down.....so to speak.

I truly enjoyed this story; I love that he found love in Ireland. In my eyes a well written story. 5 stars IMHO

I just want to take the time to thank the Author for taking the time to write this story, and to share it with us folks. Best wishes to you and yours, I hope you continue to share with us. Thank you.

Great story, really enjoyed the read. Thanks for your writing.

love it love it love it LOVE IT. thank you for such a wonderful wonderful read

Well-written and quite enjoyable, I especially liked the POV method used in the tale, as it completely eliminated all confusion of characters that I find in many tales. Thanks for a captivating, pleasant read.

Very good story; I enjoyed it a lot. 5 stars for me.

Very well written story. The last viewpoint was appropriate. However I would have like to hear the penultimate point of view fron Maddie.

Well Done! A well written story and a thumb nail view of Ireland. 5*.

Reread was just as good as the first. Great job and thank you!

Great story and well written too. Often is the case that when one door closes another opens. Glad that he found someone to make him happy. Glad that she found a good man to make her happy. Looking forward to reading more of your work. BardnotBard

5* Nice story, well-structured and true enough to Geography of that part of Ireland. Thank you for posting it.

Very well written, very funny at certain parts, thoughts and lines.

This was an excellent stort told wonderfully.

Excellent!!!!

Woooow really woooow. I really loved this story. How I hope I can give more than 5stars

5 stars

My second or third time reading. How fucked up is it that a woman would cheat and expect her husband to raise another man's baby. Raising a step-daughter of his new lover is infinitely different. He was married to Maddy and expected his wife to give him his biological child. He cant possibly raise a baby that will forever remind him that his wife betrayed him in the most egregious manner.

Thank god the baby was obviously not his child by looks or Maddy could have passed another man's baby off as Aaron's child.

Your cheating female characters are too stupid to be believed.

Tediously boring to read, Maddie was too stupid, why do all of you writers make the cheating wives out to be incredibly stupid, she can't possibly be that stupid AND be a teacher.

Just like my steaks WELL DONE👏👏👏👏

I'm proud to be Everich Irich Irish... Did you hear about the Irish Terrorist?, he tried to blow up a bus and burnt his lips on the exhaust pipe!!!

Very well done! A total enjoyable reading time and I was entertained. The characters POV change was well executed and entertaining and made for a different story. For this story I believe the change of characters POV worked very well.

Please do keep writing and I will keep reading

Just to add to my below comment! A good sign to the writing hitting a nerve is the number of comments. 180 comments is definitely an excellent sign with most being positive and the average score being high! Again well done good writing indeed!!!

An entertaining story but making Maddie so incredibly stupid was a bridge too far. I'm certain you've heard enough about the POV switches. Just add my name to the list of complainers on that. Aaron is a good character and well presented. The towns people are interesting as are the women chasing the good Dr. Overall 4* from me as I just can't get past how you made Maddie so over the top stupid.

Great story from when he dumped the cheating bitch and her bastard right up until the happy ending.

Very good story. I had to smile when I saw comment that Maddie couldn’t ’be that dumb and be a teacher’. I certainly wouldn’t call teachers dumb, but they must be really dedicated. I mean many of them go miles deep in debt to get a degree so they can work for peanuts, with one hand tied behind their backs to try and teach young miscreants and hoodlums who could not care less about getting educated. Now that’s dedication. My 2 cents, off my soapbox. Like I said, lover, great story. I like how you brought David, the other doctor, into this story just for a minute. That is a great story too.

Great story. I had some gripe, but I can't remember what it was. I'm sure it was important . . .

Maddy was stupid beyond words but perhaps hormonal. Thought Amelia was the one but that just fizzled out. 80% was great but in the last 20% it seemed to fade away.

Good story, although it had a rapid ending that could have included more.

This was a great story. It was amazing that Maddy thought that she could sweet talk Aaron into accepting the baby she made with the man she was having an affair with. Her loss was Laura’s benefit. Laura and Aaron will stay married forever. They know how special it is and they will guard against losing it with all the energy that they have. Five stars!!!!!

It is amazing how many wonderful Romance stories are hidden in LW!

Highly recommended read.

The Hoary Cleric

Best you for a well-written story. Five Stars

2nd read, still good.

It would have been great to have Maddie get desperate for funds and file for support from her baby daddy and the ensuing turmoil that causes.

Great story. You could say it was predictable but so what. I enjoyed it from start to finish.

5 Stars on a great read . My best friend married a lady from Ireland . His ex tried to start trouble and ended up getting her Butt kicked . My friends wife has said many times that Nothing will break up their marriage

Very enjoyable story. Nice job.

Great story. Good outcome for the betrayed husband. 5

Irish ladies, love them.

Ah, a fun story! Yes, it was enjoyable!! DerMtMan

I really enjoyed it. Nicely written. Just needs to be read through by someone who knows what they are doing.

Most unforgettable first line ever!

A great cuck story. ****