All Comments on 'Abigail and Emily Ch. 01'

...it would read so much better written in the first person. "I" and "she" is so much better than "Abigail" and "Emily" repeatedly. Just saying.

LarryInSeattle: thanks for the suggestion. I've submitted an edited version, and I agree that it's better in first person. I don't know why that didn't occur to me while writing it.

I loved it! I prefer 3rd person, because "I" makes it seem like it's the reader, and if the character does something "I" wouldn't, it'd be difficult to get into it. It's all preference though. Sexy story, too bad Emily didn't wake up in time! (:

I love this story. Love rubbing my pussy while reading it. I have the best cums to this story. Mmm. Thanks

Nice. Enjoyable read.

I enjoyed all of Abigail's inner monologue, fantasizing, and how she argued and convinced herself to do things, it was well-written and felt realistic. Nice work!