All Comments on 'Above Your Raisin''

This seems like a good intro to a longer story. Going to continue it?

Too bad she wouldn't have said live in the cabin with the babies...

Very good story!

Great story with depth. Could use more hot sex, hopefully that's coming in a follow up. 5 stars.

Seemed like the end was rushed, before that, it was a good treatment of a sensitive subject. Still - five stars.

Oh, you have a great story about developing love and respect here. I hope you have more of this story waiting to be written down. And don't forget descriptions! Carl doesn't seem like a broken-down man -- in fact, he seems a muscular masculine man. I hope he has a bit of sexy chest hair spread across that chest to tease Katie's breasts when they make love! Please write more!

THANK YOU fro a nice story. Here's the "but". You left a lot of meat on the bone, my friend. This story line was crying, CRYING, for more character development. As an example, Carl should have taken much more time getting Katie ready for penetration. I haven't had sex with a woman who survived rape; but I have read that it's very difficult for them to allow themselves to relax enough, and get out of their head far enough to enjoy intercourse. I know it's fiction, but except for sci-fi and/or horror, some anchor to reality makes the story more relatable.

It was good until it ended abruptly...

Piss poor ending

They had lots of good sex.

The end.

A big let down