by mutterguffin1
... you sorta broke my train of thought every time there was a parethetical 'sound' like "...single grunt, brother moans in XTC, etc, etc!" Other than that, it was very good. The idea that you had a brother & sister do it was very good also.
The reason I put in comments was because the story is a script for the two characters to read and to que them to make sound effects when prompted. It is going to be recorded for an audio CD.