All Comments on 'Adopted'

Thank you

you never disappoint, and this time you did the best one so far in my opinion.

I knew Sandi was Jeff's twin. Still this was a lovely story. I am so glad everything worked out for them.

The threat of the Tin Man sputtered out before the mask of the Batman.

The first person does get a bit tiresome in this story which sort of surprised me.

What I mean is ...Can I vote again and again for this entry??? Great story!!! I LOVED it..

That's two good ones in the last couple of days. Keep the ROLL Going!

I really enjoyed the story. As soon as he mentioned his "dead" twin sister I knew who Sandi was. It might have made it a little more interesting to hold his life history until later in the story. Sandi's history was somewhat a lie because of Mary and Joe's actions so that didn't give things away. My one gripe is the meeting where Joe and Mary come clean about what happened. It felt clumsy and passionless. Jeff and Sandi's history and future have just been shredded and it feels like they are discussing their 401K. There is a trickle of emotion but nowhere near what such a revelation should have invoked. Maybe this was partially because I had already guessed what had happened. Mary being a nurse was another give away clue (I also have BIG problems with what she did). So we had a climatic piece to the story that wasn't much of a surprise. I would suggest playing your cards a little closer to your vest in the future. The writing, as usual for a DG Hear story was very good. I liked the romantic buildup between Jeff and Sandi. Of course Trina is a love. Good romance story.

Very well done, sir.

I agree with jasonh that the reveal was clumsy and rushed, but the rest of the story was well done indeed.

DG you did it again. Another great story keep up the good work.

The tell was there halfway through the first page. The story did not suffer though. In fact I was looking for nefarious but the circumstances were acceptable and believable (although improbable).

Good job, DGHear. Another excellent story. Thank you.

For those who read my stories will know that I don't always do the obivious. In this case it was an early tell. I actually thought about not having them related. I was hoping that there would be enough interest to wonder how it all came about.

Thank you all for your comments, they are truly appreciated.

With respect

DG Hear

Well, DGH just keeps producing the goods. This is the best 'free' library going. I was fairly sure very early in the story as to where it was going but it didn't detract from the tale. My only query is why the lead in with a rather nasty 'Tinman' who just dropped off the planet!!! I was waiting to see what skulduggery he was going to cause - and nothing. Please keep writing and posting.

The only difference between his ability to pitch and your ability to write is easy to tell. HE COULDN'T PITCH A NO HITTER EVERY DAY and I've never known you to miss! What a great story, DG! Thanks for all you do.

The title says it all ... another good read from you. Please keep up the good work.

Jerry

the story is just to amazing,

I think this story should go into non-erotic or incest category. I realize love can happen between two people regardless of their origin, but I am a victim of my culture. In the same circumstances I probably would have also married my sister,especially if she was a drop dead gorgeous fun fuck, but as a reader (not into incest at all) I find this story vaguely unsettling and somewhat repulsive. Ah well, I'm sure I'll enjoy your next one.

Put a lump in the throat. I loved it.

But yes there was an early tell, SO what.

Please keep it up.

Not because you wrote a comedy, but because the story has a parallel in my own family. Finding each other was like in your story... an instant connection. I got to be Uncle Joe in our family.

Nicely done and on the mark.

Thank you.

To and Too.

PLEASE PLEASE Look them up in the dictionary.

"...Missy. She is somewhat of a physic." A PHYSIC is defined as "a purgative: a purging medicine; stimulates evacuation of the bowels"

A PSYCHIC is a person who can allegedly read minds and know the future. (Of course if they really could, they'd be rich and not ripping off desperate people)

Perhaps your story should be listed in the Humor section.

Great story, even though I saw the ending coming early on. It didn't take away from the story. Thank you - again for a great read.

As usual a well done story. A few minor gliches as pointed out, but really a cool story.

Once again , you have shared a great story. I kond of guessed at their relationship , but it was still a pleasant surprise to find them to be twins. I'm looking forward to your next story.

Thanks DGH!

I agree, this should have been placed in the incest/taboo category. I was really into the story, it started out so nicely. Then, it got weird. It was well-written though. Also, I think you lost the Halloween theme fairly early on.

as always you managed to keep me till the end for another good read

It was a very good story. I liked the beginning and ending the most. It went a little fast on the second page. But, it was a very nice one. Keep it up and good luck for contest.

The title along with the information in the first page gave away what was confirmed on the last. If there were a way to do more disguising of the outcome I believe it would have enhanced the story. But again, nice story which I enjoyed. Thanks!

Another homerun. While predictable as noted by another reader I really enjoyed it.

Cleveland Browns Superbowl Champions? *rolls eyes*

I now know it is improper language somehow, but that D.G has to stand for doggone good keep on writing this was really outstanding....

i love a love story and this was nice.

Only a writer of your stature can write an incestuous story like this and sell it to use readers. Only question would be how many different last names are in their towns phone book? LOL

I'm an adoptee myself, and I've met all of my 'genetic relations'. And it's true - I feel an uncanny connection with both of my half-sisters; we just 'get' each other in some intrinsic way. I could easily imagine, if I had met one of them 'out of the blue', not knowing we were related, that I might fall hard for her. . .

Since I am the only one that has to be pleased as far as I am concerned, DG, just disregard any naysayers. Thank you for writing.

Thanks -

Anyone who has issues with the story and incest - get a grip -

I knew she was his sister, wasn't sure how they'd explain his sister's "death".

Neat twist having her inability to have children make the incest moot.

Also neat, if sad, enabling them to grow their family anyway.

Karen hit it exactly what I was trying to think up how to say it.

Incest, if it is an equal relationship, no problems, If forced whole different story

You have written a lot of good to great and a few that were not so good but this has to be your very best up till now. It is worth a lot more then 5 but that is all they allow. more like this please!

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

Heartwarming story which hit very close to home. Thank you very much and please keep it up. You touched on the plight of orphans and foster kids and your protagonists handled it with passion, grace and love.

This story is a tad unbelievable. But it is a wonderful, emotionally very moving story. The ending was exceptional.

Perhaps Uncle Joe and Sandi's mom should have told them about being related, before they started having sex.

In the real world most people would find incest disgusting, and not just have this laissez faire attitude towards it, nor allow siblings to have sex without warning them.

But I gave it a 4.

Never would have read it if you hadn't tricked me!

Thanks!

though got a bit confusing as to who adopted who....but in the end despite actually being brother and sister they made a good family...it does happen where siblings live together and have children..but also glad they were able to adopt the other kids...liked it...

I love a story that holds your attention and keeps you wondering if there is a hidden twist coming up. Of course there was and resolved with a happy ending for all parties. I look forward to your future stories. Thanks for sharing.

But why all the drama. She's a college skank, he's a man whore. She had a hysterectomy. Why not castrate the dude because of a childhood bicycle accident to add to the story?

Uncle Joe is rich. He knew who Sandi was. He never told Jeff about Sandi. That is bullshit! The siblings should never have been separated since Uncle Joe had lots of money to take care of both of them.

Quite a decent story.

Very nice story of a gentle love and a good family. There are many documented cases of siblings that had been separated at birth or as very young siblings that didn't know or remember that they had a sibling. Somehow during an event or something like shopping when the siblings were near to each other they would do like Jeff and Sandie and have a weird feeling of some sort and feel like they have known each other all their lives. Later they would find out why they had such immediate strong attraction among themselves. Weird, but truly documented. Identical twins that have been separated early and didn't know they had a twin could be thousands of miles apart and have strange feelings and be sick corresponding with the other twin. Like I said weird stuff but absolutely true. Go figure Thanks for the wonderful story.

A bit involved but still a good story. Btw, it's not "physic", it's "psychic".

You weaved the tale so well, you are now one of my favorites.

Great ending!

Wish you would write more,thank you for what you have done. Enjoy all your stories. 5

Mr. DJ is a great writer of romance! Thanks for this and other submissions!

Baton Rouge Cajun Guy

Decent story.

Wonderful story with a great ending. " And They all lived happily after"

Gets my 5 star vote.

A very good story that falls outside of any Literotica patterns that I've seen. Thank you!

Excellent read! Interesting twist with their relationship, but I think it worked out well. 5* again.

Munchie184

Yes !!!!!

What a touching love story. What are the odds that twins separated at birth would meet and fall in love. Well done 5 stars

Great story!!! 5*

Very good story.

This touching story is really excellent. However, it is somewhat convoluted and I had difficulty following the various relationships of the various characters. Please make sure that the names of the various characters is always spelled the same (like Sandi and Sandy) so that the reader does not conclude that these are two different characters.

Five stars for the writing itself and six stars for the story itself.

BJ

Good story, only a couple of minor grumps, consistent name spelling and it’s not physic, it’s psychic, otherwise all ok.

We enjoyed your beautiful loving and touching story. As said, there were places the names and a little context flow could have been a bit better, but the story is touching and ends with soul mates joined by their hearts.

Thank you for sharing your words and bringing us a warm heart and smile.

SW

beautiful story 5

Beautiful and touching story.

Wonderful story!

reread just as good as the first time 5

Great story. Not nitpicking but it's not,"PHYSIC", it's, "PSYCHIC". 5*s.

One of the best stories!

Great story!

Wow! I didn’t see the whole twins thing coming, glad they got past it though.

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Beautiful Story - Beautifully Written!

11/10!!!!!

Ok. I've read maybe 500 stories on this site, and this has to be the best story so far, by far.

Interesting story, back stories, development, everything! I am a retired investigator and the twists and turns written here kept me captivated but totally off balance. Definitely the best. I will read each and every submission by this author just hoping the rest are of the same caliber! 5*...

Loved it!!!

Loved it. Had to give it 5 stars.

UNCLE JOE WAS A BASTARD!!

MARY WAS A REAL TRAILER PARK WHITE TRASH!!!

NOT ROMANCE , IT IS AN INCEST STORY!!!

They should have been told as soon as Uncle Joe showed up to know. Still a 5.

Good job. Great story telling

from an adopted point of view, Interesting. it is something that goes though your mind. could this person be ???

why not

I had to stop and think about the story before I could rate it.

What a great and original story.

Tanks for sharing!!

5 stars

"Something you should know about Missy. She is somewhat of a physic. "

Do you know the difference between a 'Physic' and a 'Psychic'

Physic - "medicinal drugs"

Psychic - "relating to or denoting faculties or phenomena that are apparently inexplicable by natural laws, especially involving telepathy or clairvoyance."; "a person considered or claiming to have psychic powers; a medium."

You have 2 kinds of stories. I either laugh out loud or cry! Thank you, Mike