All Comments on 'Adventures of Carly & Dana'

Just found your story and absolutely loved it. Really cute characters and really Hot action. Notice it's been over a year since you posted it, so really hope you've been working on a sequel that will be ready for posting soon. Will be interested to read your other stories in the meantime.

I think your story was great. Part 2 ? Hell Yes! Besides the grammatical errors that everyone else seems to want to dwell on, I believe this was a great story and was very intriguing and got me excited lol!

-Latina <3

Take a bit of time proof reading and maybe you could write a legible story

of course a part 2 please have a part 2

Rather delightful reading for a night home alone

Uuhm, there are so many spelling errors & confused formatting that made reading this a bit too irritating. I always feel a bit upset & cheated when an author doesn't care enough about their work to proofread before posting. It certainly doesn't bode well for future stories.

I strongly suggest you get an objective editor to help you prepare if you're going to post another chapter or different story.

It was a fun read, a bit too cutesy for my tastes but fun.

Stick to it, kiddo. You have talent & with practice you'll get more polished.

No.

Can't wait!!