All Comments on 'After School'

awesome hot story love it now you have started let the this horny story. go for that next erotic partor parts love the story and the exciting writing.

you really need to continue this one.. it is hot.. but needs more...

This story didn't make any sense - it needs a much more coherent set-up, even if your plan is to get straight to the sex. 2 main examples: If the girls are long-time friends, why do they need to "explore" Monica's house? They should already be familiar with it. And second, if Rachel is so virginal and doesn't realize Monica's lesbianism, I cannot see any plausible reason why she'd strip naked the moment they arrive, nor allow Monica to touch her so quickly and brazenly. Fix these internal consistency problems and you'll have a much stronger story.