All Comments on 'After Soccer Practice'

Great start;good writing! Leaving the reader to "want more".

A great believable storyteller with terrific details & descriptions! Look forward to reading more of your work! Could use simple minor editorial brush-up in a few spots, but overall is outstanding literotica! Definitely want more!

As I said you should really consider writing another one. The setting,the timing,the whole story was very believable.

As a journalist you should put your talents to work, don't waste the gift you have. Very good for a first story.