All Comments on 'After the Fall Ch. 08'

Actually, a bit less grrr this time, Michael seems to have become a bit better, although I couldn't help thinking that the rehearsal was a bit gratuitous for him :D. I am worried for Mariah among those wolves, although Michael noticing all kinds of subtleties in her body language etc. made him seem a bit too competent compared to how he's been up till now, it is indeed a risky situation she will be in...

Ashtray is getting better, much better. By now we all know he is not perfect and never will be. But I am starting to see his attempts to be better and wanting to be “perfect“ for her. Which is a huge departure from his normal “me me me” self. I still think he still use the trigger “kitten” too often and often too inappropriately. But even I am coming around to the point when I can understand how it’s hard for him not too. We shall see how he does on their trip. Who knows, I might even remove the word ashtray from my next comment if his growth trajectory continues. I doubt it, but then again... ;)

Mariah is still amazing and one of the strongest female leads written into a submissive role. I was surprised to see that while ashtray has a lot of introspective moments and changed behaviors in this chapter. She had few. Was it because she doesn’t need to change and he does? Because she’s just decided to accept things won’t change and only reacts to the things that do? Or because she’s becoming comfortable with the relationship and not in a passive way, but in a “this is starting to feel right” so she not triggering kind of way...if that makes sense.

Either way ashtray is doing better, she is seemingly doing well, and I can’t wait for their next adventure. As always very well done.

I just wanted to add that I appreciate all the work you put into this story. You could have raced through the sharing of the plan for the compound, splashed in some sex, and then flown them off to the land of the Elites. But you didn’t. You focused on delivering a story with a plot. Everything you added about their relationship, their mindset, their continued (but improving) flaws, and despite what some might say about the length, those details and story arcs matter and made this a great chapter.

Thank you.

He did enjoy the rehearsal a bit much, didn't he? But he's Michael, so it would have been weird if he didn't. One thing you may notice about Michael is that he's much better at picking up on subtleties when HIS behavior isn't at issue. He is still Michael, after all.

Michael is trying, but he's still Michael. If you decide to take the "Ashtray" nametag off of him, don't throw it away. You'll be needing it again later!

Mariah's getting comfortable with the relationship, but she's not comfortable with feeling comfortable about it. She's at a disadvantage trying to sort through feelings that she doesn't acknowledge having. She's also inexperienced with an actual relationship, as opposed to her previous friends with benefits arrangements that she controlled and restricted.

I'm glad you appreciated the "work" part of this chapter. I had hoped to advance some of the main plotlines a little more than I managed to get in this chapter, but there was just too much that still needed to be done first. The characters just weren't ready to be at The Center quite yet, and it was no good trying to jerk the plot forward prematurely.

Thank you as always for your thoughts on the Chapter, and for your encouragement. Both are much appreciated.

Any more news on when the next chapter will be out? I don't mean to be a nag, but I'm just looking forward to it! I love stories like this with such extensive world building and a strong, intelligent heroine.

In the next chapter, I'm hoping that someone at the center makes a pass at Mariah and we get to witness the reactions of both her and Michael... But I'm excited for whatever you have in mind, regardless!

I'm glad you're liking it so much but sorry to report that I don't have a firm estimate yet. I was hoping to finish it this weekend, but I haven't been able to work on it so far. I've got some covid-19-related family medical issues that are my focus right now. I think it will probably be at least another week, but it could be longer if I don't get time to work on it.

I'm not going to give any spoilers away on what happens at The Center, either! :-P I will say that they are going to be glad to get back home afterward, but for different reasons.

Found and binged all your chapters today! I just wanted to say that I appreciated your work :)

That was a lot of reading! I'm really happy to hear you're enjoying it. There's more to come soon!

Oh no! Good luck and stay healthy.

Thank you so much! I haven't gotten it myself so far. I'm hoping things will settle down soon. I really appreciate the sentiment. :)

This is truly an amazing story. There are some minor typos, and spots where a word was missing, or a fragment that should have been edited out, but on the whole it’s very well written. The tone of the writing is a very good match for its setting and subject matter.

Unfortunately now I’m hooked, and looking for Ch 9. Been checking the bio page looking for updates, awaiting anxiously.

I need more of this. Im fully intertwined with all the characters and story line

Love this, can’t wait for the center. Do you know when we can expect the next chapter?

The Center adds an element of mystery. Can they find trustworthy security people? Can they keep their social changes a secret from other Elites? Why is that David character helping the Mayor? Yes, I am now caught up, and at your mercy! It's probably presumptuous to think you might need someone to go over your next chapter, but I would gladly help. Winning over the towns people is another upcoming story that I await on the edge of my seat. Will Jack find a love interest? Will they find the skills they need? You have not mentioned teachers. A good educator can go a long way.

I also like the power that Mariah is getting. Michael is learning to trust her more, but there will certainly be struggles in that area to come, like when he finds out about the transmitter. Probably at the worst time.

Keep up the good work. =DT

Just wanted to make sure the author didn't die or something, I'm fine waiting but I'm genuinely starting to get concerned

I really need more of this story. Hope all is well.

Hoping the author is well...

Worried about the author...

I found this series (I think it's a series) 4 days ago and I'm already caught up! I am so excited for the next Chapter! I hope to see more of the relationship between Ezra and Sarah, and sex scences with and among other people. Btw, is it me or does Sarah come off as a little girl at times?

OAN: Do you have a website and any published books?

Great series! Can’t wait for the rest of them. Have not been able to get hit reading it!!!

I enjoy the series and look forward to the next chapter.

Ugh I hope the author is okay and just gave up on the story. If that's the case, please come back, we love your writing!

I would love to have you complete this series. Dystopian, romance, erotic, novella. Best I’ve seen on this site in a long time.

I love this story! Hoping you’ll be able to continue writing it—it needs an ending! :)

Much better! Michael is redeeming himself and she's not getting lost in the process. Well done

This is a great story. Hope we get a final chapter.

Would love to see more! Thank you for sharing

PLEASE FINISH THE STORY!!! Seriously the best novel I've read in a long time. It has everything. Love the dystopian setting and the reluctance power dynamic with the perfect amount of punishment (i.e. not too much!) Everything is set up perfectly for the center. We must know what happens! Also I'm just invested in the whole story right now and would love a happy ending chapter after that with a pregnancy or something.

Boring ass chapter - he's just trying to justify turning her into a fucktoy. "You need to get used to waiting for permission instead of doing things the way you automatically would."...say what???

Ah man you just left us hanging bahahahaha so is this a platform for writers to feel out how the masses will accept a story before publication 🤷🏻‍♀️

This has been one of my favorite stories so far. Please come back and finish it!

I hope you come back. Very well written and engaging.

This story is a favorite I read over and over again. Please finish it. Please.

Extremely well written and engaging, even without the amazing sex scenes which just add to the story and character development (on top of being very hot!) Looking forward to the next chapter!

Loved this story, and I’m so sorry you didn’t finish it. I was hoping that maybe you had finished it somewhere else, but if so I have been unable to find it.

Nyx- I hope you’re doing well, and I hope you come back! Can’t wait to read more.

I love this story. Unfortunately it’s another dead end. I really hate that about this website. They shouldn’t allow unfinished stories. Especially when they’re this good!

This is a really great story. I hope you come back to it.