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All Comments on 'Al You Make Me Smile'

by barefootcowgirl

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CbareCbareabout 6 years ago
Great

This is a great story, I hope to hear more.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
A great start...

... to a wonderful series. I found your writing to be "clear" with few ... if any ... grammatical / spelling errors. Your scenario is NOT hokey and is quite believable. The story is HOT. Gave it an easy "5".

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Excellent

Damned good realistic story. Decent character development. IF I had a complaint bout it TOO SHORT! More? 5

JJMemaw0623JJMemaw0623about 6 years ago
Great, loved it!

But it was too short!!! (pouty face). You have some skill with a pen. Keep writing, I loved it and can't wait to see if you bring them back for more!!

joefeltonjoefeltonabout 6 years ago
Pretty hot!

I enjoyed this, and no it is NOT too short. The story developed at a nice pace. I would have liked to know more about these two people, their history and such, and also some of their chats online, how that evolved over time and how they decided to meet in person. Good job though! Thank you for your work!

Joe

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After a dry spell of over a year I had some concerns about getting carpel tunnel. I thought maybe if I got back into writing smut I could save myself some surgery down the road. Things have turned around some and I am no longer chewing on my bedroom furniture, but I still have...