All Comments on 'Alarm Clock'

One little criticism... This is a story site, and pictures are rarely used here. We create images using words. Word choice, then is all-important. So when you describe the moisture between a woman's legs as 'snot', particularly during a cunnilingus scene, you immediately snatched the reader from titillated to grossed out. Licking her 'nectar' or her 'honey' is hot. Licking her snot is just, "Ewwww!"

Otherwise, good effort.

Very interesting and well-done for a shorty! Hot sex. Very realistic.

Boring

Snot? Ugh!

Filling his mouth?

Mother's milk?

Spoiled the whole thing.

And finally, the PT Cruiser convertible is the ugliest car in the world.

Poor word choice leading to bad imagery, I didn’t get past the first couple of paragraphs.

Sorry but it badly needs editing to be enjoyed.

Better than some...certainly not as good as some others

Cudoes for characters and jobs.

Fun way to awaken. Then even more fun to find the are mother and son.

total turn off, snot running out of her cunt filling his mouth full, no woman gets that wet. Drinking milk from her tits every day since he was born, I think not. no woman is going to breastfeed every day from baby to full-grown man. do us reader's a favor and never write and post any more of your total shit. and what does the car have to do with anything? one star and that is too much, sounds like you are a 10 yr old with no clue about sex.

Bad story and bad words what the hell is pussy snot almost made me gag, glad you ended it and didn't continue with more> Plain stupid!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I have to agree on the snot thing terrible wording but over all a good story as far as it went. I loved his discription of his mother, finally a true picture of what a woman that has had babies woud look like, and I loved the fact that no 10" cock was mentioned. That alone made it an interesting read.