All Comments on 'Alexis & Dad Turn up the Heat'

If' she's 5'1", how are her legs long? Does she have a torso? Sorry, but that completely distracted me right off the bat.

This is nothing more than a poor attempt at a Harlequin Romance novel.

For the love of God, get some fucking sex in there!

You go to great length to make sure the readers know that it was entirely consensual and the long time frame build-up tells us the sex was not done on the spur of the moment.

Given that mindset of the characters, I think one of the other would have mentioned or asked about birth control before "doing the deed". It would have been in keeping with the characters personality and relationship.

Anonymous- me too about the long legs...I'm 5'1" and evenly proportioned height wise - short legs & short torso.

Pther than that, this wasn't my cup of tea, not that it was bad, I just prefer a different angle when I read Daddy/daughter stories. I did like the sex wasn't right away.

You are fairly good with your descriptions of sex. There was very little build up to daddy fucking his daughter. For a virgin, she was rather uninhibited and vocal: "Oh God Daddy you feel incredible. I feel your cock pulsing in my pussy." That just doesn't sound like realistic dialogue for a virgin getting fucked by daddy. And your spelling needs attention. "Pedal" is where your foot goes on a bicycle while "petal" is part of a flower. And "slid" is the the past tense of "slide."

You would really benefit from having an editor who would pay attention to the technical aspects of your writing.

Large number of verb tense switches. Dozen or more misspellings. An editor would be a good option. I agree with the other comments also.

This was very well done. It reminded me of my recently passed wife and the great sex we would have. She once had three climaxes in sucsession. I always tried to make sure that she got satisfied and she did the same for me.