All Comments on 'Alien Zoo Ch. 01'

This was a good setup and story development chapter, definitely want to read more of it!

Hi. Think about your characters, who are they, and how would they react? Your dialog is what is know as "nose-on" which is the equivalent of someone shaking their fist and saying "I'm so mad right now I could slug you." There is no subtext, no hidden backstory, etc. and as a result, they and the aliens all seem one dimensional. Try checking out God of Mischief and Lies by FireFaery. https://www.literotica.com/s/god-of-mischief-and-lies. It also features an abduction, by Loki, who finds something he can't control.

This story has Potential. Some good character development and dialog could make this a lot if fun.

I love your submissions, keep up the good work!