All Comments on 'All in the Family'

I’m a fan but this sucked. Couldn’t get past page one. You could do better.

really like it and that is strange we normally don't like things with dads involved but this was very nice. 5* keep up the good work

I loved this! It was steamy, hot, and amazing. It is without question your best one yet. The full family orgy is always my favorite kind of story. Please make more of these, and you are among the best in this genre. Well done!

This is your best story so far! It has the steamy, intense, and hot sex scenes I look for combined with masterful pacing. The all family orgy is my favorite typing of pairing, with mother-son coming in second, and father daughter in third. Please make more pieces like this; you are one of the best Literotica authors in this space, easily on par with lovecraft68 and TryAnything (two of my favorite authors and Literotica legends in the Incest genre). Keep up the amazing work!

P.S: What are your upcoming plans for your next few stories.

Fun...a bit over the top, but still believable.

Am I crazy or have I seen the section about the grandmother's first marriage (husband being lost so hooks up with family member) before?

Lol I posted two comments bc I didn’t realize they needed time to be approved.

One of your best stories🔥🔥🔥

Thanks for sharing. 😎

On page 1 they weren’t using condoms.

I gave this a five for the story. It would have been a 4.5 for a few spelling errors that would only be caught with a grammar checker but I like this story a lot since it was a theme I don't see much

Extremely erotic indeed

Drake fills his sister with cum on page 1, yet fucks her bare for the first time later?

Drake plays video games online, so the story is set in the now. Yet, Grandpa impregnated granny in the 1940’s - making Dad at least 70 not the 40 he is now. Maybe, you might say, granny had him later. Well if he’s 40 now, that means he was born around 1980, making granny around 60 when he was born.

The story is rife with typos and misspellings. Did you write this in about an hour and a half while watching TV?

Having spent the better part of 10 years trying NOT to get pregnant, I usually don’t enjoy incest baby stories, but this one was an exception. So hot.

The story is excellent, but you have a lot of punctuation, grammar, and spelling errors. I noticed you have written a lot of stories in under two years. I think you're rushing things.

I fail to find a reason for the POV changing. I don't think I'm missing anything. Made it confusing.

UNTIL the sibling baby turn of events.

The sister's pregnancy was a complete turn off.

Read your stories a couple of times before posting them.

You're making far too many mistakes like when to use your and you're.

It should have been thinking not thicking.

Stick to third or first person narrative..

Maybe even try to get someone who knows what they're doing to read and edit your stories.

Not an incest baby fan, but otherwise the story was hot.

I won't dwell on editors, but that's why the 4*s

IMHO, spelling and grammatical errors don’t matter a damn. Yes, it would be wise to have an editor run the rule over your stories, BUT, and it is a huge but, again IMHO, this is a work of erotic fantasy, and can/should be read as just that. What is of primary importance is the author’s imagination. And quite clearly, that has run riot, for which we may be truly grateful. So, thank you, MountainDewMan. Greatly appreciated, and well worth five stars; more if they were available.

One the one side the story is hot. On the other, despite what some commentators think, the way too many mistakes really detract. You really should take advantage of the voluntary editors offered by this site. I struggled between rating the story a 4 or a 3, mainly because it was hard to read at times.

Will you continue?

Loved the sex.

did not like it to phony

They say that whenever incest passes from generation to generation it causes abnormalities in their children. I've never researched to find out if it's true or false.

Really love your stories but please get a proof reader. Silly little mistakes takes the edge off

The ending made the story too shallow.

And I 3rd or forth the need for an editor or at least an educated proofreader.

Bill S.

Nice story, I like many of the author's works.

But if we are taking this seriously, second generation brother and sister having children is getting on pretty thin genetics.

hawt

A nice story, but Egyptian and European Royalty has many examples of what happens in multi-generational incestuous offspring.

Once, not likely a problem, even for very close family members, but even the genetic problems are outweighed by the penalties that can be bestowed by society on that activity!

I was really impressed by the story's opening. A real attention grabber. Well done! I agree with the others re: proofreading. Those little errors do disturb the flow of the story.

You started out ok but then you went way too far off the beaten path so to speak you could have held it fine if you would have kept the other dick out of the situation and another thing is the moment she said she yelled daddy while another man was getting ready to fuck her would have stopped that process straight away it doesn't matter if the man getting ready to fuck her was her brother he is still a man and that would have put a stop to any thing sexual happing between them at that point and time cause a real man wouldn't share period and nor would he stand fucking a woman knowing that woman is thinking about and vocing fucking another man it all boils down to him not sharing a MANS ego and pride would not allow himself to be cuckold like that instead he would either kick the woman out or leave himself in this case the woman was his sister so he couldn't rightfully kick her out but he would leave himself regardless of being home quarantine or not if he didn't leave for that at the moment he would have nothing to do with her again and he would avoid her at all cost until he was able to leave so again too far off the beaten path it started with a hint of realistic to way to unrealistic in just a short spand that and you had no build up to it

Too unrealistic. 3 stars.

Bill S.

You messed up in the story. You wrote that the brother had been cumming in his sister then you changed it when the mom said no condoms when you have sex with your sister. That don't make sense if they been breeding before. You arr all over the place and need to stick to the storyline of seduction. You really don't make sense during the pregnancy sceen. Needs work. If you need help reachout.

Pretty good story. Went on a bit more than necessary, but good in concept. Many typos, but so what, anyone can figure out the intent.