All Comments on 'All Mixed Up'

And in the end, he's ultimately a beta, willing to stay married to a woman that would have HAPPILY fucked around on him. Eject, and grow a spine, you pathetic piece of shit.

These smoothbrains scream and moan about "cuck shit" and how every story is the same. But the burn her at all cost crowd insists on the exact same kind of story. You know, wife cheats, hubby discovers and either ghosts her or feeds her to the wood chipper. The only real world sameness here seems to be that every commenter whose worldview is cuckshit/not cuckshit is the exact, identical low-functioning putz.

He had to have been expecting this since college since she was a "party girl". When she lost her mind he shoulda dumped her, fucked Brad up for good measure, then go get Rita who he's loved for 30 some years, despite the age difference.

This writer is usually pretty good but not this time. A waste of time to read. No real story or conclusion.

A little too formula sorry, zero flow, maybe try dot points next time if you use this style of writing again.

Pretty good but needed ending a bit better. She got off easy . I was and still of the mind set of have fun with the party girls as sometimes they are the best to fuck and be one of the guys but seriously dating or marriage definitely not . At some point the temptation for variety of cock or her past coming up in your face. After the huge football player was asking her out with him there and her saying her popularity with football team would’ve been a deal breaker for me . Causally date , fuck but not Serio. She clearly loved to fuck and is a no no for me

AND? Part 2? this can't be the end after Paul is talking about Karma and revenge, or was he realizing why he was beaten?

So, he still loves her and wants to stay married? I don't think the Mike, as described, would dismiss her actions and more importantly, her intended plans with Brad so quickly, if at all. A second chapter, where Mike is planning an exit strategy makes sense to me. She danced close to the fire without getting burnt that time, which I believe her self-indulgent slut brain would eventually interpret as a green light to give a new cock a try… only to be more careful so Mike is unaware. Next time, I don’t think she’d be upfront, but instead, cheat behind his back being a safer (in her mind) way to go. Mike, of course, would be way ahead of her and be totally ready to send a message “6” to the new paramour, pull the pin on the marriage to a cheater, enforce the pre-nupt which actually protected his assets just as much as Gina’s dad intended to protect his daughter’s & hello Ellen Grove.

Not worth commenting on. 2*

thats got to be one hard ass marriage to be in. not sure how she wasnt cheating on him the whole marriage. she is obviously not a marriage type of person. the way u wrote her i dont see that marriage lasting 20 years. unresolved issues here make me think the author was lying to us and she is fucking men on the side. oh and stop writing what is going to happen in a story then go back into a back story detailing what u already told us develop the backstory first this was ppl will actually read it instead of skimming over it. flashbacks work well in video doesnt work so well in a few pages story, maybe a book but not a short story

I wonder about comments. This is a clear 5. Unique approach to no cheating. And a lesson to man so he’ll know better. But readers prefer cheating then boiling the cheaters in oil. You can’t please everyone but you did please me.

Good story, kept my interest throughout. A married man that is willing to put his wife and kids at risk (losing them) and ruin another marriage for a little sex on the side, needs an ass whipping. Should be knocked on the head a couple of times, knock some sense into him. The same also holds true for a married woman willing to risk the same. Maybe not the physical punishment, but her attention needs to be gotten in a severe manner in which she is punished.

Ending not so good

Good Job! Great Writing, Great Story! I love a happy ending! 5 stars. Thanks.

Icing on the cake would've been an accidental meeting with his old mafia family so she knew what he could be capable of

Sort of ok, unusual, ended somewhat poorly. Evokes ambivalence.

She was ready to cheat once. She'll do it again but without giving advance notice.

Good story line...

But i didn't feel anything. It felt like testimony... no emotion. Still, i read the whole thing and while i disagree with the decision to stay i lined the story.

Oh yes it’s good to read about the man getting his comeuppance for a change, yes it takes 2 to tango, but if your able to stop it before it starts, and hurt the man it might even put him off ever again chasing other woman , nice way of writing this cool but straight to the point

Guess the moral of the story is you don’t fuck with Mike. Four stars ⭐️ for this one.

Not a lot of pathos but at least Mike was direct and forthright. And yes Gina, your date never woukd have happened.

Femdom agitprop but with an acceptable outcome, but she’ll cuck him eventually.

To use fishing jargan, this is like pulling your lure out of the water, 8 feet from the boat! Or, you got a strike, but you didn’t set the hook, and let the line go slack. Wifey backed off, but only temporarily. There was never any push from hubby to get a post nup. Next time, she won’t ask permission. Plus, she still be be working with the asshole. I see this, as a temporary solution, to a permanent problem. 3 stars

Too forgiving.

Thr back story was interesting. Her reasoning after Mike left was erroneous. She thought he would do nothing because it was only option if he wanted to stay married. Meanwhile he had made arrangements yo have Brad beaten up and put in the hospital. Hard to believe she is a successful attorney. Their reconciliation was strangely lacking of emotion. Odd.

Good story but, he was way too lenient. What happens the next time the brain dead bitch gets the hots for some dick head. He should have left her and shacked p with his secretary, After her boyfriend got his ass kicked he is not going to mess Then he can tell her that this was her one and only mi with her again. After he has screwed his secretary for a couple of months he can let her beg him to come home. Then he can tell her that this was her one and only mistake. If there is another he will dump her and use the prenup to get rid of her permanently.

That's what u think once a mind cheater always be a mind cheater, if first u don't succeed try try again

THANKS

The story was good, but not super or unusual,,, no matter, it was fun--- -

BUT THE WRITING AND COMPOSITION WAS SPECTACULAR!!.

This is the second " Demander" Story that I have read ( and I will now read ALL of the remainder ) --- The flow and direct communication of events, actions, thoughts, and feelings, in the story from the written page over to the readers mind and emotions is super. That is the Art of this Author. Even a common story line comes alive.

The way the flow of thought to the reader from the written page occurs, without all the un necessary fluff of additives and adverbs, is magic. Do more writing-- and don't get caught up (as others do) in how " pretty" your prose is. Tell the story, make me feel it, and don't try to impress me with fancy words and descriptions..

Bob

Love it when a man sticks up foe what is right. Keep writing.

He will have it to do over again because this arrogant bitch learned nothing.

FTDS

No nonsense writing style. I like this very much! Plotline far from original ideas, but the laconic writing made it fresh and quite enjoyable for me. Thank you! 5 stars of course.

Like hell that would be the end. He should kick her ass to the curb. What an arrogant bitch. There is no fucking way he could ever trust this cunt again.

The more I read Demander the more I like. The ending could have been a little deeper, some. “ kick in the ass” for Gina, but I’m not a story teller. All around I liked it.

Tons of backstory, interwoven with interesting characters, lots of buildup, and then nothing. Our hero ends up, married to a woman for the rest of his life, whom he cannot trust. This is actually a long story that would work better as a 750 word story.

She's still a cheater that had fully intended to cheat and hasn't learnt anything because she's not aware of the consequences since they were pretty much kept hidden from her. She'll just come up with something else in future when the next Brad surfaces and Mike can't trust her as far as he can throw her. Sounds like a great marriage.

Wish I had "friends" like his when I found out my ex was cheating with my best friend Good story (jaybee`186)

Excellent.

High marks for: MC didn't scream, lecture, whine, play the full LW bag of passive-aggressive gimmicks, puke, cry, get drunk, cry some more, puke again, run away to Timbuktu and sell his wife into chattel sexual slavery because she stumbled a bit. Fifty beautiful, bloody stars!

-TJY

You have to wonder if she will take the lesson to heart.

decent story, well written

Boring

Love it I just wish I had had those contacts when my exes cheated on me Love these BTB stories I just hate these forced and drugged cuck stories that seem to be all the rage with Mr Literotica (jaybee186)

Began with a bang.

Ended with a whimper.

This story could be longer and needed to be more detailed.

Some price for Gina was needed.

A follow on conversation between the husband and wife would make it better.

Had the ingredients of a 7 star ⭐ story.

Ended up at 3.5 for me.

Great writing from Demander. Has potential to be a classic.

Write a follow on please