All Comments on 'All That Glitters Ch. 01'

Nice world and character building, lots of hooks for future use ... skillful writing and a good read. Thank you.

Is he dead alive what happened? Or was he just a pawn to introduce other snobby charecters of the story

Loses his legs, misses out on the big score and is no longer a notable character in the story.... Sucks for him

Very competent exposition in this and prologue for what has potential to be a really good “space opera” story.

Your detail is not too overdone, and you’ve defined your characters pretty well.

Looking forward to how you will tell this “first contact” story, a staple of Sci Fi and one of my personal favorites in the genre. As well as to expand on what has to be a fascinating backstory on Capt Clark....why is such a capable guy mining in relative anonymity on the fringes of Terran occupation?

Bravo!

Peace readers! Sean Murphy does not appear in every chapter, but you will see him again. His role in this story is to showcase some of the medical improvements that have become common place in the future and to showcase man kinds social moors. As such, he is a minor character (no pun intended - space miner). But he does play a role in gaining the sympathies of the readers, as he apparently successfully done. Glad to see you care about him.

Well thought out and entertaining! I definitely wants more!

I'm happy to read and lurk most of the time, but Ex O? No, it's XO.

The flow is a little stiff and railroaded along too. Raymond is too perfect and capable and doesn't allow for the reader to identify with the character, although I was disappointed that he's only benching short sets of 100kg.

Very excellent writing and story!!!

Every once in awhile I am lucky enough to stumble on a great story like this one.

I chanced across your story as a winner in the June 2020 contest and wanted to begin from the start. I loved the prologue and wanted to see if that was luck or the beginning. I’m so happy to say it is the beginning of a wonderful tale!

I found myself saying ‘damn, that’s so good’ several times during your story and I really enjoy the characters you are developing. I look forward to reading the rest of the story!

First contact and the army could ... (COULD???) show up in a month. Something tells me a bunch of rich science nerds will show up before them. Seriously, a month? smh

Better find them before they find you. Just saying.

Good story, got my blood pumping. Except for the boring board meeting.

Needs a good editor. Hope you found one.

You earned your 5, but the “fade to black” ending was a cop out.

I know, you recouped at the beginning of the next chapter, but you lost an opportunity to develop your new character.

Nothing more to see here, folks, move along

I was hoping for some more Sean Murphy, not some military tough guy.

Ok I believe this is it for me. I was expecting to read an origin story not a story about a 50 years old military hardass.