All Comments on 'All That Glitters Ch. 03'

Thoroughly enjoying this tale!!!

I have been looking for the next chapter to your story every day this week. Wanting to see how this story develops. Enjoyed it.

You are a very good writer. Good pace; good character dev; good exposition.

Completely agree with your “regrets” about no sex in the chapter! The best erotica is that which complements and enriches a story, and especially a character(s). You have a really good story going here...making the sex integral to the story is a skill not many authors have.

Looking forward to future installments!

I love this story and am looking forward to every episode (I am an old Marine myself).

However, in your last two paragraphs, your spell-checker let "trail" get by instead of "trial".

Excellent Space adventure, loving it so far. Five Stars! I can't wait until Sean gets a handjob from his nurse Hayya. Semper Fi!

Since you say we need to deal with your statements, I have a question. Do you know that the Captain's Executive Officer is known as "XO"? Not Ex O

Enjoying it so far, and happy to know I have a lot of story to get through! There's a few awkward bits of dialogue and exposition (like when the captain says the lead scientist "struck Captain Whatt" it's kind of awkward how he speaks in the third person. Y'know? [Joke quote] "Captain Whatt said the lead scientist struck Captain Whatt. Captain Whatt is looking forward to the next game, and Captain Whatt is not at all worried about what Captain Whatt's competition might be up to... Captain Whatt has ice in his veins!" Lol)

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But aside from a couple things like that (I'd have to go through it again for specifics) and me wondering when somebody is going to suggest supplementing the station's pulse cannons with some missiles, because it obviously has space for it, it was great. And I'm really looking forward to seeing what happens, and how your writing improves as I work my way thru. 5*

Whoops. Also, yeah, fingers crossed you eventually decided to dispense with the E in Ex O. Makes my teeth itch, lol. XO. eXecutive Officer. Because it's pronounced the same either way, and one less letter means a tiny bit more efficiency in writing and sending messages, esp in Morse code, for instance. Also X is cool. Lol.