All Comments on 'Allie's Eighteenth Birthday Party'

this story definitely need a part two.

awaiting the next chapter...

Don't stop with a blow job. Put your seed in her cunt

And again too short.

He did nothing to her. No touching. No fingering. No kissing. No licking. No tonguing.

She deserves a good orgasm ot three.

Four stars.

Get someone to go over it before it's punished. She was waisted? Wasted more exactly. Her face was beat red? How bout beet red. Simple things like that ruin a story.

Decent idea story otherwise

2 stars

Dragonrider

Hey everyone, thanks for the reception on this story! I made it semi clear that this was a story recycled from elsewhere, but I DIDNT also emphasize that it’s older too. The reason you see the mistakes you do or the awkward timing/lack of incompleteness is simply because it’s dated. I was and am still very much an amateur and I just didn’t want to go back through this to rework things. I only wanted to post this just to have it in my portfolio.

Thanks again for reading!

Got any more hot ones to submit. Very entertaining read. Thanks for sharing.

"Being guys in our early 30's" and yet he has an 18 year old daughter?? I couldn't get past this and stopped reading. Try to have a more believable story line next time.

I loved it. I was reading it 2 days ago and had to leave it and came back searching for it to finish. I loved it. Plenty loved it. An editor will help w the grammar but the attitude of the comments left won’t at all 😂 don’t write to please your haters, write to please your fans. And I love short bj stories w older men. If people don’t think we women sometimes don’t give without receiving and are happy they’re wrong 😂

That was great

This needs more chapters! Please write more! It was so erotic!