All Comments on 'Allison The Lifeguard Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymous4 months ago

Excellent. time for chapter two. well over due

liz33ndliz33ndalmost 5 years ago
that was hot

this was so erotic. I hope you feel it is worth another chapter. it hit me so hard and lovingly. thank you

JmgurlJmgurlalmost 7 years ago
When is ch2

Great story

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
I'm a lesbian and this is not

I have a major problem, I'm a lesbian and I have a major problem when men are involved in "so called" lesbian stories! This would have been really hot between the two women. Even so you write well for a newbie! Jenny Elf.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Well written but pace a little fast

A bit slam bam thank you ma'am. Tease us a bit more.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Keep up the good work!

Great start for a new author, you seem to know what you're doing! Would love for this to continue and looking forward to seeing other stories aswell!

TaanshiTaanshiover 7 years ago
Love it!

Loved the story, really hope you continue developing it!

jimmythekjimmythekover 7 years ago
continue

I hope you develop this story further!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Loved this!

Its so evilish, and manipulative, makes me want to write, you're awesome if people can be followed on this website I'm following you when I figure this website out!

Its so sexy, but i wont get into TMI ;)

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Nice debut

I enjoyed this. Keep it up

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