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by 1965Squash

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Nice start, but you should have noted it as Chapter 1

Classic dilemma for a man in this situation, even one who isn't going through the trauma of separation and divorce. Looking forward to their further adventures.

The only obvious fault was the switch from third person to first.

spredmspredmabout 8 years ago
What

Coffee are you kidding me

Sidney43Sidney43about 8 years ago

Good start, hopefully there is more, lots more.

crazycujocrazycujoabout 8 years ago
teaser

It'll probably never be finished, like some of the others from this author. Don't waste your time.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Its a start.

I'll read it and rate it once its a story.

Chief3BlanketChief3Blanketover 7 years ago
A good story

A good start but it has been nine months since this was posted and further chapters are needed to complete this story. This tale seems to have fallen into same hole that so many stories do on Lit, and that is the hole of forever incomplete stories.

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