All Comments on 'Alpha Eyes Ch. 02'

I really like all of your previous work and please please dont stop. Great stuff

More please!

I've read both of you "alpha eyes" stories!. These two chapters are incredible! Mind control is a heavy favorite of mine and usually there arn't to many that tickle my fancy BUT! This has been one of the most enjoyable ones i have read in awhile! I can't wait to read the mext chapter and anymore you happen to make!

Hi! JC here. I really hope you enjoyed chapter two in this new story!

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You really have a great way of pushing the narrative, and describing sex! Awesome!

It’s perfect...sexxy, erotic, Cinderella tale with a twist!!! Can’t wait to see the novel ideas you present. Looking forward to the next chapter. Yes please.

thog4u

Very yummy indeed! Building up to the next chapter, I can't wait for what's next! Thank you!

Hope you continue on with this. Very good!

This is a great story line, I kind how you have taken the time to actually build a backstory into your work. I look forward to reading more of your work. Thank u!

Please continue this story. It is well written and flows well. I look forward to reading chapter 3 soon.

Love the new storyline. Hopefully I’ll see another chapter

This series is going to be your best one yet. For part 3 it would be a great start to finding out through a bit of BDSM and heavy sex just how far “StepMommy” had gone in her plans to screw Dilan out of his money, and wreck his mind. Also, can we find out what she had to do with the Wreck that killed her husband?

Can hardly wait for chapter 3, what a great read

Love this tale so far - hope that it continues to a really BIG blow-up (not JOB)!

Read the first chapter then this one. Definitely carry it on. Want to know what the stepmother is up to.

Hi JC,

To be honest, I wasn't really happy or interested after chapter 1. It was a but too bland and overused in my opinion. It is a very well written story of course as are most of your story (Which is why I favourited you) but once again, the plot wasn't as nice as I hoped.

Then you wrote this chapter and I must say that I am hooked! It is simply brilliant, the way you have expanded from the first chapter and now I can say that the two chapters together look much better than just the first chapter. The characters are looking good and the way you didn't use too much violence instead used more controlled sex is something that appealed to me. I am not much of a BDSM fan, in fact I'd go so far as to say that I don't like it much. So I sincerely hope it doesn't go too dark and stays a bit more safe.

All in all, you have a good writing style and I like your stories so far. Can wait to read more. Keep up the awesome work.

J. Jamie Dupane

More simply devine

Great story line. I hope that you continue it. My only suggestion....maybe elaborate more on having the “bimbos” strip for him/us.

Nice revenge story

I am enjoying this story and I hope you continue writing!

Just completed part 2 and looking forward to next installment. keep writing, very entertaining.

Enjoyed Dilan giving his bitchy stepsister a good fucking, and watching him develop his new powers. Hope to see his greedy step-Mom get down and dirty for him. Thanx for the continuing Read!

You can help me...

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Interesting characters, nicely paced with enough suspense and sexy scenes

That was so hot. I had to work hard not to start throbbing in the breakroom at work. I didn't think that I wanted a slutty bimbo fucktoy before, but now I'm thinking it might be more fun than I realized...

Your story is well done, good presentation, interesting story and most of all well edited / proof checked. I wish more of the other writers would take the time to clean up their story from the errors that get written in on the first draft. Yours are well written and no blaring mistakes to interrupt the flow of the story. My only complaint is the story is to short, the entire story could have been written at one time. I've enjoyed it so far and expect to read it all and the rest of your submissions as well. I hope they are all as well done as this one is so far.

Anony Mous

I’m absolutely loving this series and the writing is so well done, it’s racey af and really well paced as a piece - sure to get you goin.

Big up to ya JC - I’ll be watching this space.

I really like how you gave the MC powerful motivations for his actions.

Getting better and better

Good story. Me like

This is intriguing and I’m loving it.

Interesting so far, more needed.

Bravissimo!!!

Love the story. Can't put it down.

Curious how ANYONE knows the color of their own vision?! Even with mirrors, I don't!

Great story, stepmom next on the menu

5/5

Well written. Good character development. I'm really enjoying the story so far

Very well written stories. The only thing I don't lime is how you skip some of the build up. Like all of a sudden therapist was blowing the lead. Then the stepsister playing with her tits on the bed all of a sudden. They had no undressing or no lead up to the juiciest parts. I really like the stories and it won't stop me from enjoying them nut you asked for comments so here they are.

So he has no idea how on earth to contact his doctor to do some information gathering? Even when he can contact her telepathically?

So he is given superpowers, and just assumes the people who arranged it will be susceptible to these powers?

Not forcing the therapist to give him any information is so shockingly stupid......

Great so far. Can't wait to see mommy dearest get her just rewards. He should use a spoon instead of a knife so it hurts more. Maybe control mom's mind and turn her out doing tricks; she's aware but can't stop herself.

It's always so satisfying when total bitches get their comeuppance. Part of why I love any stories where high school bitches, especially the slutty cheerleaders, get controlled or owned by the MC. This story reminds me of that type of thing.

He discovered a conspiracy where his loving step-family wanted to mind fuck him in order to steal everything his father built. And instead of gathering more information and take steps to undo whatever the therapist was doing while he was under, what does he do? Fuck. Then goes home and you think he will at least try to figure shit out now. What does he do? Fuck. We get it, it's a sex story. But for the story part to be there you need to have the characters act properly, not like drooling idiots. This dude is such an idiot that he deserves to be a slave for the bitches. Only thing that saves him is plot armor.